Talk:HMS Hesperus (H57)/GA1

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 21:26, 15 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

  • Dabs and links look good.
  • Officers and enlisted men, per before.
  • "The ship was purchased on 5 September 1939 and was purchased by the British on 5 September 1939 after the beginning of World War II.[11]"
    • Damn copy paste.
  • "Renamed HMS Hesperus, the ship was commissioned on 22 January 1940 under command of former Fleet Air Arm pilot Commander Donald Macintyre[12] Hearty was renamed Hesperus on 27 February, after the Hesperus of mythology.[13]" - something here doesn't make sense.
    • I don't know why my computer insists on doing what I tell it do rather than what I mean for it to do!
  • "Although a glancing hit, the collision was so violent that it flung the U-boat's captain and first lieutenant from the submarine's conning tower into the destroyer's motorboat." - why did the destroyer have a motorboat, and was it tied alongside the ship or was it stowed around the bow or something?
    • Rephrased.
Will check back soon. —Ed!(talk) 21:46, 15 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:57, 15 December 2011 (UTC)Reply