Talk:HMS Jupiter (1895)/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Ed! in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 14:07, 28 June 2012 (UTC)Reply


  • "Namesake" in the infobox needs a cite. Otherwise include it in the prose and cite it.
    • I can't find a citation for it, so I've removed it.
  • " all future British battleship classes had circular barbettes." -- what were the advantages of circular barbettes?
    • Conway's doesn't say, but I'd guess it's mostly a savings in weight to allow for more armor elsewhere.
  • "In 1908 and rendered obsolete by the emergence of the dreadnought class of battleships, " -- in the lead but not in the text. Needs to be cited.
    • Added a line on the advent of dreadnoughts in the body.
  • Also, which classes of battleship rendered this one obsolete? And what advances on their technology?
    • See above.
  • "After that she became an accommodation ship." -- what is an accommodation ship? Please clarify.
  • Dup link tool returns two results: flagship and Devonport.
    • Fixed.
References look good. Just a few small things. —Ed!(talk) 14:26, 28 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Just to note, my power was knocked out in that freak storm two nights ago, so my presence on wiki is going to be very limited until its restored. Parsecboy (talk) 11:16, 1 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
Alright, everything should be addressed - let me know if there's anything else, and thanks for reviewin the article. Parsecboy (talk) 02:04, 3 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
Great work. Passing the GA now. —Ed!(talk) 14:11, 3 July 2012 (UTC)Reply