Talk:HMS Kempenfelt (I18)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Buggie111 (talk · contribs · count) 16:57, 25 September 2011 (UTC) Great article, Sturm, as always. Few concerns:

• Cite #17 needs to be properly formatted.
  • Deleted.
• Possibly an explanation about the discontinuing of MOEF
  • I don't know if it was discontinued, I only know that many of its groups were pulled to the UK for Overlord.
• "She remained in British waters for the rest of the war, although the ship was damaged in a collision with SS Empire Bond on 14 February 1945 and was under repair until early March" sounds kind of strange, there isn't an "exception" to the fact she stayed in British waters.
  • Edited, see how it reads now.
• Where did the boiler fire occur? Was it en route, or whilst docked? (not really necessary for GA, just kind of curious)
  • I think it was dockside, but I'm not sure.
• You've linked Type 286 radar twice.
  • Good catch.
• Probably create all red linked articles, but that would be at a later date.
• Sentence sounds as if it's missing something: "Type 286 short-range surface search radar was also added as was a HF/DF radio direction finder on a short mainmast.". Probably an "A".
  • Added.
• How reliable is magma.ca? Going to what I assume to be the homepage (http://www.magma.ca), redirects to primus.ca, a telecommunications company. Going back up to the harmony link (http://www.magma.ca/~harmony/) leads to a Christian dispute resolution site.
  • It's a picture of the ship's remains, but I'm going to delete it because there's no sourcing or explanation. Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:50, 25 September 2011 (UTC)
    • Nice one there. Passed. Buggie111 (talk) 17:55, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

That's about it. Buggie111 (talk) 16:57, 25 September 2011 (UTC)