Talk:HMS Lowestoffe (1761)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: —Ed!^(talk) 23:20, 20 October 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria) (see here for this contributor's history of GA reviews)

1. It is reasonably well written:

   Oh Hold

   1. The lead needs to be expanded a little more to completely summarize the entire article in more detail.
   2. "basing her lines on those of HMS Aurora, a former French prize..." — What about this ship was based off the old one? A little more about its design would be helpful.
      1. I have tried to make it a little clearer.Acad Ronin (talk) 03:26, 21 October 2010 (UTC)
   3. "she saw little action in Home waters under her first captain..." — Where are the "home waters" and what are their boundaries?
      1. Since it's a British ship, the home waters would just be british waters; as such I just removed that note, not needed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 21:03, 22 October 2010 (UTC)
   4. "Lowestoffe exchanged fire with the fort and ran aground, but was gotten off, though she was much damaged" — could you explain a little bit about what this means/entails?
      1. I have tried to expand this a little to make it clearer.Acad Ronin (talk) 03:26, 21 October 2010 (UTC)
   5. "Only five men drowned in the wreck, and that when their boat capsized in the surf.[21][30]" — Is there something wrong with this sentence?
      1. I have reworded the sentence.Acad Ronin (talk) 03:26, 21 October 2010 (UTC)
   6. "n April 1803 the officers and crew of Lowestoffe and of Bonetta for the salvage of the specie that Lowestoffe was carrying.[35]" — same here, I don't understand what it is saying.
      1. There weere words missing. I have added them.Acad Ronin (talk) 03:26, 21 October 2010 (UTC)
   7. There are a lot of short paragraphs in the article. Those shorter than two sentences should be expanded or merged.
      1. I have fixed one of them.Acad Ronin (talk) 03:26, 21 October 2010 (UTC)
2. It is factually accurate and verifiable:

   'On Hold'

   1. "Lowestoffe spent several years on the station, carrying out patrols between Barbados and Antigua." — Ref needed
   2. "She was paid off in 1773, and reduced to a 28-gun Sixth Rate." — Ref needed
   3. "In 1847 the Admiralty authorized the award of the Naval General Service Medal with clasps "LOWESTOFFE 24 JUNE 1795" or "DIDO 24 JUNE 1795" to any surviving officers and crew that claimed it." — Ref needed
      1. There are now two inline cites to back up this claim.Acad Ronin (talk) 23:44, 22 October 2010 (UTC)
3. It is broad in its coverage:

   Pass No problems there.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy:

   Pass No problems there.

5. It is stable:

   Pass No problems there.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate:

   Pass the image in the box works, but I'd suggest additional illustration if you want to promote the article any more.

7. Overall:

   On Hold pending changes. —Ed!^(talk) 23:49, 20 October 2010 (UTC)

Everything's done except for the lead, which I'll get to in a bit. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 21:33, 22 October 2010 (UTC)

The page now meets the criteria as I see them. Well done! —Ed!^(talk) 00:02, 23 October 2010 (UTC)