Talk:HMS Nottingham (1913)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 11:35, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

I'll have this to you soon. JAGUAR  11:35, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• Once again I feel that the lead needs to be expanded somewhat to summarise the article. A couple of sentences on its career etc
• "The Town-class cruisers were intended to protect British merchant shipping from attack by enemy cruisers" - attacks?
• "The ships had a crew of 480 officers and other ranks" - this needs a citation
• "During 1915 at The ships were protected by a waterline belt amidships" - broken?
• "and the 1st LCS was escorting Vice-Admiral David Beatty's battlecruisers" - no need for hyphen in Vice Admiral (unless it was stylised that way in the early 1900s)
• "he ship was assigned to the 1st Light Cruiser Squadron (LCS) of the Home Fleet" - link Home Fleet
• "A few weeks after Britain joined the war on 4 August" - even though I know what it's on about, a mentioned of World War I would suit this sentence
• "commander of the Grand Fleet" - link Grand Fleet
• No dead links

Very good and well written article, I could find little wrong with it. Once all of the prose issues are addressed and the lead is expanded, this should have no problem passing. JAGUAR  14:33, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

I think that I've addressed all of these; see if they work for you.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:52, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

Thanks, looks good. Promoted. JAGUAR  10:18, 3 April 2016 (UTC)