Talk:Hailie Deegan/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 21:54, 11 August 2018 (UTC)

I'll review this article. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:54, 11 August 2018 (UTC)

Lead

• Get rid of "currently" (see WP:RELTIME)

•  Removed. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• Start a new paragraph with "Deegan grew up racing off-road..."

•  Done. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• Mention that she started on the K&N in 2018

•  Done. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• Mention that she started transitioning to asphalt in 2016 (or instead of the year, you can say her age at the time)

•  Done. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

Early career

• Good

NASCAR

• In this sentence: "Deegan was one of nine drivers named to the 2017 NASCAR Next class, becoming the youngest member of the class and the only female member," the word "becoming" doesn't sound right.

•  Done. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• Also related to the NASCAR Next class, put her being the only female member into historical context. Note that the previous three years also had one female member.

•  Added. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• In Harvick's quote, change it to "Alright, that's the person [Kevin Harvick International]", with the square brackets to clarify it was paraphrased. (abbreviations should be spelled out)

•  Done, though it's Incorporated, not International. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• At Roseburg ==> In her next race at Roseburg (clarify)

•  Added. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

Personal life

• Good

Motorsports career results

• Is there a reason why you list East before West in both charts, even though she's primarily in the West series?

• The project generally puts East before West for most drivers, so for consistency, that's how it's done here. If you insist, I'll oblige, though that's the reason for it. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)
  • That is fine. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:48, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

Overall

• This link doesn't work: https://www.bmrnapa.com/bmr-racing/all-3-bmr-drivers-finish-in-top-5-at-orange-show.html

•  Fixed. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• I checked the highest plagiarism concerns and found no issues.
• Everything looks sourced.
• The quality of the prose is very good.

Placing on hold. These issues are very minor. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 22:25, 11 August 2018 (UTC)

@Sportsfan77777: Believe everything is  Done! Thanks for the review. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 02:50, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

Looks good. Passed! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:40, 12 August 2018 (UTC)