Talk:Hal Hunter (American football, born 1932)/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by WikiOriginal-9 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 13:15, 9 November 2017 (UTC)Reply


Lead
  • "Hunter earned Associated Press Honorable Mention All-American honors his senior season in 1955." Seems to be missing a word; maybe "..honors for his senior season.."?   Done
  • "Hunter was a coach at various high schools and colleges.." Probably worth clarifying he was a football coach.   Done
  • "accumulating a record of 9–30–1." Explain what this notation means, probably using a note.   Done
Early history
  • "He was a three-year heavyweight in wrestling at Canonsburg, recording 18 pins with a total of 33 wins.." This could do with some wikilinks to explain the technical terms.   Done
  • "Hunter also won three letters in track as a sprinter, shot putter, discus thrower and javelin thrower." I don't know if it is an WP:ENGVAR thing, but shot, discus and javelin are considered field events in "track and field" in the UK; is there a better term we can use (maybe athletics) than track?   Done
I changed it to "track and field". WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:39, 9 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
Coaching career
  • You use the phrase "He was then.." five times (including one in the lead), which is a bit repetitive.   Done
References
  • Change the details for ref #1 to show |work=Denver Weekly   Done
  • Change the details for ref #2 to show |website=Washington-Greene County Chapter: Pennsylvania Sports Hall of Fame   Done
  • Change the details for ref #3 to show |publisher=Warlick Funeral Home   Done
  • Ref #4 needs to show that it is subscription only, and could do with |via=Newspapers.com   Done
  • Ref #5 needs more details: publisher, year of publication, page number etc.   Done
  • Ref #6, as ref #4.   Done
  • Ref #7 needs a page number.   Done
  • Ref #8 needs a page number.   Done

I'm going to stop there with the references. I would suggest you take these points on board, and check the rest yourself. Once you have done them all, I'll take another look over.   Done

Overall, this is a pretty good article with just minor quibbles really. The referencing needs a bit of tidying, but nothing more than that. Nice work. Harrias talk 13:15, 9 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

I think I fixed everything. Thoughts? WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:44, 9 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
Great work, well done. Harrias talk 08:42, 10 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for the review. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 10:44, 10 November 2017 (UTC)Reply