Talk:Hammer-headed bat/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 00:07, 14 July 2020 (UTC)

Reading now! --Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:07, 14 July 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for your excellent copyediting, as always. Enwebb (talk) 17:08, 18 July 2020 (UTC)

• This differences – these
  • fixed
• which in this case is long and thin stretch of land, – a
  • Fixed
• A 2011 study found that Hypsignathus was the most basal member of a clade of megabats that also included the following genera: Epomops, Micropteropus, Epomophorus, and Nanonycteris. Together, these genera form the tribe Epomophorini within Epomophorinae. – Both sentences, and the terms "tribe" and "clade", refer to the same taxon? If so, can this be combined/condensed? This wording seems much more complicated than it needs to be.
  • Simplified and rearranged this part
• In this alternate taxonomy, however, it is still placed within the tribe Epomophorini with the same other four genera. – "it" still refers to "Epomorphorinae" here, I think it was intended that it refers to the species instead?
  • Simplified and rearranged
• Its tongue is large and powerful, with an expanded, tridentate tip. The tongue has – The article sometimes uses "Its" (more unconventional) and "The" (the usual wording); we have both variants in this example ("its tongue", "the tongue"). This could be consistent throughout the article.
  • I changed all instances of "its" to "the" in the description section, though kept it in a few other places where I felt it made more sense.
• In some populations, breeding is thought to take place semi-annually during the dry seasons. The timing of the dry season varies depending on the locality, but in general there are two breeding seasons, one from June to August and the other from December to February. – Repetition here ("semi-annually", "two breeding seasons")
  • Simplified.
• which lasts 1 – 3 months. Leks consist of 20 – 135 – here, and elsewhere in the article, the dash, when replacing "to", should not have spaces: "1–3 months".
  • Thank you, I had the faulty impression that en dashes were always spaced! I'll have to fix this in some other articles I've worked on recently.
• Most records of this species are restricted to rainforest – wording does not make completely sense; "most records" can only occur, but cannot be restricted to somewhere. Can we use "occur" here?
  • Fixed
• That's it, an highly interesting species I have never heard about. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 22:40, 17 July 2020 (UTC)
  • Thank you for your time!