Talk:Hannah Montana: The Movie (soundtrack)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Chase wc⁹¹ 23:38, 20 December 2009 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   Prose: See prose comments here. MoS: "claiming it was indeed a merge of 'the best of both worlds'" The lead section should not contain info that is not present in the main body of the article. There is no mention in the article of any critic stating this. Fixed.

   Fixed Mos issue. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 18:31, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   References: "'The Good Life' is a sugar-coated celebration of Gucci handbags and Prada shoes," this sentence is plagiarized from allmusic; either reword, quote, or drop this. Reliable sources: Source #10 (MySpace) is not a reliable source. Original research: "The remaining songs on the soundtrack are about romantic love." This needs a cite. Fixed.

   Quoted information on "The Good Life". Removed cite to MySpace and original research. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 18:34, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   See my MoS comment. As no one said this, this seems like a fan's point of view. Fixed.

   Was removed. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 18:35, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   I'm putting this on hold for one week. If the issues are not addressed by then, I will have to fail this GAN. All issues have been addressed by either the nominator or myself. This article now passes its GAN, and can be listed as a good article.

Prose issues

Lead

• "The film is an adaptation of the popular Disney Channel Original Series Hannah Montana" → "The film is an adaption of the popular Disney Channel original series Hannah Montana"

• "The album was released on March 23, 2009 under Walt Disney Records" → "The album was released on March 23, 2009 by Walt Disney Records"

• "All of the songs in the album went through the film's director Peter Chelsom" → "All of the songs on the album were approved by from the film's director Peter Chelsom" (or some variant; this needs to be made more clear what it went through)

• "Songwriters include Cyrus, Gerrard, Swift, and many more" → "Songwriters include Cyrus, Gerrard, and Swift, among others"

• "It became Cyrus' best charting single in the United States" → "It became Cyrus' best-charting single in the United States"

• "Cyrus' 'Hoedown Throwdown' is the album's follow-up single" → "Cyrus' 'Hoedown Throwdown' was the album's follow-up single"

 Done Addressed all issues. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 18:45, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

Writing and development

• "and the song's songwriters" → "and the song's writers"

• "The last track is a remixed version Cyrus' hit" → "The last track is a remixed version of Cyrus' hit"

• "Rascal Flatts performs" → "Rascal Flatts perform"

 Done Addressed issues. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 18:49, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

Music structure and lyrics

• "each of Cyrus' songs incorporates her 'husky twang'" → "each of Cyrus' songs incorporate her 'husky twang'"

 Done -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:00, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

• "and is a standard issue power ballad that places piano solos in between chiming electric guitars" → "and is a standard-issue power ballad that places piano solos between chiming electric guitars"

 Done -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:00, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

• "'The Climb' contains a philosophical message about remaining optimistic through any of life's struggle" → "'The Climb' contains a philosophical message about remaining optimistic through any of life's struggles"

Replaced with "'The Climb' describes life as a difficult but rewarding journey'". Is that OK? -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 18:58, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

That's fine. Chase wc⁹¹ 20:08, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

Critical reception

• "with artists like Flatts and Swift" → "with artists like the Rascal Flatts and Swift" (bands are typically referred to by their entire name even after first mention)

 Done Lol - I had no idea Rascal Flatts was a band; I thought it was a solo performer. Thank you for pointing that out and it was corrected. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:11, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

• "and Gwen Stefani 'Spotlight' and 'Let's Get Crazy'" → "and Gwen Stefani in 'Spotlight' and 'Let's Get Crazy'"

• "the presence of so many and drastically different genres make the album 'a little weird.'" → "the presence of many drastically different genres makes the album 'a little weird.'"

• "which also recalled Shania Twain" → "and also compared Cyrus to Twain"

 Done Addressed all issues. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:14, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

Chart performance

• "with 139,00 copies sold" → "with 13,900 copies sold" or "with 139,000 copies sold"

• "After, four weeks of ascending and descending the chart" → "After four weeks of ascending and descending the chart"

• "It also topped Billboard Top Country Albums for nine non-consecutive weeks and Top Soundtracks for nineteen non-consecutive weeks, respectively" → Drop "respectively," it's not needed.

• "for the shipment of 15,00 copies" → "for the shipment of 1,500 copies" or "for the shipment of "15,000 copies"

• "was later certified platinum by the Producer of Spanish Music" → "was later certified platinum by Productores de Música de España"

 Done Addressed all issues. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:04, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

Singles

• "The song critically appreciated" → "The song was critically appreciated"

 Done Issue addressed. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:01, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

Promotion

• "Cyrus and her father performed in London in an Apple Store, which was sold exclusively by the United Kingdom iTunes Store" → "Cyrus and her father Billy Ray performed in London in an Apple Store; the taped performance was sold exclusively by the United Kingdom iTunes Store"

• "'Let's Do This' was first to premiered" → "'Let's Do This' was first to premiere"

• "charting at number seventeen in the Billboard Hot 100" → "charting at number seventeen on the Billboard Hot 100"

• "at number seventy-six on the Canadian Hot and at number eighty-one in the Hot 100" → "at number seventy-six on the Canadian Hot 100 and at number eighty-one on the Billboard Hot 100"

• "A series of promotional music videos were released to Disney.com on March 2009 entitled The Miley Sessions. The videos feature Cyrus in a recording studio singing" → "The Miley Sessions, series of promotional music videos that featured Cyrus singing in a recording studio were released to Disney.com in March 2009"

• "In addition, Cyrus performs four songs" → "In addition, Cyrus performed four songs"

 Done Addressed all issues. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:08, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

All issues that were not addressed, fully addressed, or I did not address to begin with, have been fixed by myself as there weren't that many and were all minor. Chase wc⁹¹ 20:08, 21 December 2009 (UTC)