Talk:Harry Arter/GA1
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Courcelles in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 17:50, 26 October 2018 (UTC)
- I'll do this one as well. Courcelles (talk) 17:50, 26 October 2018 (UTC)
- "professional debutdebut" - Fixed
- Link or explain "non-league" in the lead. - Linked
- "chronic tendonitis in his achilles and he eventually ruptured the muscle" Could use some wikilinks for context, and as the Achilles is a tendon, which muscle are you referring to here? - Added link and reworded
- "fitness, struggled to break" fitness, he struggled. - Fixed
- "afterwas" is not a word - Fixed
- Could use a link to explain "He was booked" or clarify that means a yellow card. - Linked
- Could use a link to hernia. - Linked
- Phrases like "added time" and "extra time" could likely link somewhere too... people might not be aware those are different things. - Linked
- "Overall, he scored 5 goals in 34 league matches during the season as Bournemouth finished in eleventh place" Don't use two number formats in one sentence. - Fixed
- "for the penultimate game" Should that "for" be "in" instead? - Done
- " he was ruled out until October" Any idea why? Source only states it was an injury so I've included that
- "the result came only 1 week after fellow south coast club Southampton had beaten Sunderland 8–0." What's the relevance of this? - Removed
- "teammate- describing" I think this should be an unspaced emdash or a spaced endash, certainly not a unspaced then spaced hyphen. - Done
- "PFA Player of the Month" What is the PFA? - Done
- "This was the first time Bournemouth had been promoted into England's top flight in the club's 125-year history." No citation for this? - Done
- "to rest first several weeks" to rest for the first? - Done
- "1– defeat" It's obvious that has to be a 0, but it's missing. - Done
- "2– victory" Missing the other score again. - Done
- "he "real strength" Do we need a "had" here? - Done
- " action to early." Too. - Done
- "thethe season" - Done
- We're about a third through the season now, aren't we? What's he done for Cardiff?
- I've marginally expanded the section but there hasn't been too much of note really yet, no goals, no assists, no controversial incidents to speak of.
- "under15" could use the hyphen like the rest" - Done
- "He made his full international debut against the Netherlands in a 1–1 draw in Dublin on 27 May 2016, in which he was awarded man of the match. " Citation? - Done
- Any info on why (and how he's eligible) to play for the ROI?
- He's eligible through his grandparents, mentioned at the end of the first sentence of the section.
- That's all I've got. Courcelles (talk) 18:27, 26 October 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks for another review, I've made a quick start here. Kosack (talk) 20:29, 26 October 2018 (UTC)
- @Courcelles: I've responded to all of the issues raised above, let me know any thoughts you have. Kosack (talk) 09:42, 27 October 2018 (UTC)
- Looks good. I added a wikilink in one place. Good work, promoted. Courcelles (talk) 13:56, 27 October 2018 (UTC)
- @Courcelles: I've responded to all of the issues raised above, let me know any thoughts you have. Kosack (talk) 09:42, 27 October 2018 (UTC)