Talk:Haruj/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Atsme (talk · contribs) 17:40, 28 February 2019 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Section "Vents" - Most of the lavas appear to originate in fissure vents[13] whose location was controlled by tectonic faults. Whose is typically associated with a person. Suggestion: Most of the lavas appear to originate in fissure vents in a location controlled by tectonic faults. The suggested text had the wrong numeral, so I went for something else. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:31, 28 February 2019 (UTC) Same section, many of which form rows of cones and sometimes have large craters[19] and which occur Needs clarity regarding "and which" - does it speak to rows of cones or large craters? If the latter, how about and sometimes have large craters that occur mainly in the Al Haruj al Abyad part of Haruj.? It refers to the rows of cones. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:31, 28 February 2019 (UTC) Section "Geology" - For better flow, consider Haruj is not located close to a plate boundary; rather, volcanism there and in other African volcanic fields located atop crustal domes have been explained with the presence of hotspots. In the case of Haruj, a mantle plume is considered unlikely. Same section: Wau an Namus is sometimes considered to be part of the field, other volcanic fields in Libya are... Suggestion: Other volcanic fields in Libya are Wau an Namus, sometimes considered to be part (what) field, Gharyan, Gabal... Agree with both, but I'd leave "but in the case of Haruj a mantle plume is considered unlikely." Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:31, 28 February 2019 (UTC) Section "Eruption History - ...of the oldest generation lava flows, and also these of the second oldest albeit to a lesser degree. I'm of the mind that "...these of the second oldest albeit..." needs clarity. When "these" is used, something is typically being pointed to or close at hand, and I'm having trouble identifying what "these" might be. Also, a comma should precede albeit. Same section: Haruj may still be active. Some toponyms such as Garet Kibrit ("sulfur mountain") refer to volcanic activity, and solfataric activity has been reported in the field. Also, in lieu of the redirect why not use fumarole? @Atsme: Is it clearer with "that"? Rectified the "clarify" thing. The source uses "solfataric", which is more specific. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:31, 28 February 2019 (UTC)
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	Well written, informative article. Promoted to GA.