Talk:Hawaii Five-0 (2010 TV series) season 10/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:41, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect more comments later in the day. Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?} 20:41, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• The image's caption should probably mention that it's the cover of the DVD.
• Everything else on the infobox looks good.
• Add a comma after "September 27, 2019".
• Could you add a short summary of what the show is about to the lead?

 Done TheTVExpert (talk) 20:52, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Cast and episodes

• Is there a reason why some cast members have references, and others don't?
• "leavs the team" → "leaves the team"
• "Grover, Adam and Tani" → "Grover, Adam, and Tani"
• "a autonomous" → "an autonomous"
• "Grover, Junior and Adam" → "Grover, Junior, and Adam"
• "in the process making a HPD" → "in the process of making an HPD"
• "they allow to assist to a certain degree .Scooter and Skeez's" → "they allow assistance to a certain degree. Scooter and Skeez's"
• Episode 8, 10, 17, 18, and 19 are over 200 words, failing MOS:TVPLOT.
• "had turned of the helicopter's" → "had turned off the helicopter's"
• "the task force run" → "the task force runs"
• "and his partner, Higgins (Perdita Weeks) and discovers" → "and his partner, Higgins (Perdita Weeks), discovering"
• "an luxurious" → "a luxurious"
• "found frozen in nitrogen cool steamer room" → "found frozen in a nitrogen cool steamer room"
• The sentence "Danny tends to her wounds and tries to flag the atren of passerbys" needs rewording.
• "Steve, Quinn and Tani" → "Steve, Quinn, and Tani"
• "apologize to her" → "apologizes to her"
• "does't" → "doesn't"
• "as instructor" → "as an instructor"
• "After shooting practise" → "After shooting practice"
• "Thailand for a trail" → "Thailand for a trial"
• "a convenient store" → "a convenience store"
• "Lorena arreste In other matters" → "Lorena arrested. In other matters"
• "The Five-0 team investigate" → "The Five-0 team investigates"
• "committed to steal" → "committed to stealing"
• "Meanwhile Tani helps Gerard" → "Meanwhile, Tani helps Gerard"

 Done I've left the references for now, unless you think they should be removed. TheTVExpert (talk) 22:01, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

@TheTVExpert: It doesn't look good for only some characters to have citations, so yes, I think they should be removed. Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

 Done TheTVExpert (talk) 14:11, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

• "in the process making an" → "in the process of making an"
• "they allow to assistance" → "they allow assistance"
• "boat captain and a photographer" → "boat captain, and a photographer"
• "Upon investigation the team" → "Upon investigation, the team"
• "replicated as according" → "replicated according"
• "the team diggs" → "the team digs"
• "other then that" → "other than that"
• Episode 18 is now 203 words (201 without the name) failing MOS:TVPLOT.

 Done TheTVExpert (talk) 18:43, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

• "on one his arms" → "on one of his arms"
• "One of said kids, tells" → "However, one of the kids tells"

 Done TheTVExpert (talk) 19:23, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Production

Development

• The reference after "2019–20 television season" is not working.
• "CBS announced its fall schedule on May 15, 2019, and it was revealed that the series would undergo a time slot change. The series is being replaced by Magnum P.I. at its previous time slot and will now air an hour earlier, holding the time slot formerly held by MacGyver which moved to mid-season."

• "CBS announced its fall schedule on May 15, 2019, and it was revealed that the series would undergo a time slot change, with the series being replaced by Magnum P.I. at its previous time slot, and the series now airing an hour earlier, holding the time slot formerly held by MacGyver which moved to mid-season."

 Done TheTVExpert (talk) 14:11, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Filming

• The reference after "Los Angeles, California" is not working.
• "Primary filming for the series continues to take place in Honolulu, Hawaii, on the island of Oahu. The series holds a sound stage at Hawaii Film Studio in Diamond Head where it films many indoor scenes. Exterior shots and outdoor scenes for McGarrett's house are filmed at the Bayer Estate in Aina Haina."

• "Primary filming for the series continued to take place in Honolulu, Hawaii, on the island of Oahu. The series had a sound stage at Hawaii Film Studio in Diamond Head where it filmed various indoor scenes. Exterior shots and outdoor scenes for McGarrett's house were filmed at the Bayer Estate in ʻĀina Haina."

 Done TheTVExpert (talk) 14:11, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Casting

• Add a comma after "July 20, 2019".
• "it was announced that Christine Lahti would be returning" → "Christine Lahti announced that she would be returning"
• A reference is needed for the last sentence in the second paragraph.
• Add a comma after "February 28, 2020".
• "in the seasons penultimate" → "in the season's penultimate"
• Combine the last two paragraphs into one.

 Done TheTVExpert (talk) 14:11, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Viewing figures and home media

• This reference says that the rating for the premiere was 1.16, which should be rounded up to 1.2, not 1.1.
• This reference says that the rating for episode 10 was 1.06, which should be rounded up to 1.1, not 1.0.
• This reference says that the rating for episode 12 was 1.38, which should be rounded up to 1.4, not 1.3.
• This reference says that the rating for episode 15 was 1.07, which should be rounded up to 1.1, not 1.0.
• This reference says that the rating for episode 17 was 1.09, which should be rounded up to 1.1, not 1.0.
• This reference says that the rating for episode 18 was 1.09, which should be rounded up to 1.1, not 1.0.
• This reference says that the rating for episode 19 was 1.05, which should be rounded up to 1.1, not 1.0.

These changes are all needed per the citations used:

• "8.90" → "8.91".
• "9.38" → "9.39".
• "8.53" → "8.54".
• "9.47" → "9.48".
• "9.43" → "9.44".
• "9.65" → "9.66". (this is for episode 8)
• "9.76" → "9.77".
• "8.85" → "8.86".
• "8.81" → "8.82".
• "10.56" → "10.57".

• Home media looks good.

 Done

References

• Archive all archivable sources (use this, this, or this to do so).
• Looking at the references column, there are a lot of citations missing "website", "first", "last", "date", "access-date" parameters, along with other stuff. I'll get more into the issues in this section once my other suggestions are addressed.

 Partly done I'll get to archiving the sources soon. TheTVExpert (talk) 15:06, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

 Done TheTVExpert (talk) 20:52, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Overview

GAN table

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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