Talk:Health in Indonesia/Archive 1
Latest comment: 5 years ago by KyanaBee in topic Suggestions for Improving the Lead
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Suggestions for Improving the Lead
This lead is quite short, and does not describe well what the rest of the article is about. The introductory sentence lists four factors affecting health in Indonesia, but not all of these factors are discussed on the page, nor are they the main topics that the page contains. The rest of the information in the lead is a seemingly random assortment of facts pertaining to health in Indonesia, and not all of these facts are cited. I recommend that this lead be rewritten and expanded upon to give a more complete overview of the article, in addition to having citations added.--KyanaBee (talk) 14:35, 5 September 2019 (UTC)