Talk:Herbert J. Ray/GA1
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Reviewer: This is also Sven Manguard (talk · contribs) 19:05, 7 January 2013 (UTC)
GAN Quicksheet 1.23 SM
(Criteria)
Starting comments: Here goes...
1. Well written: 
Section acceptable
- a. prose/copyright:
Acceptable - b. MoS compliance: Acceptable
2. Accurate and verifiable: Section acceptable Assuming good faith on the printed sources (i.e. almost everything), as I don't have access to the books you're using.
- a. provides references: Acceptable
- b. proper citation use: Acceptable
- c. no original research: Acceptable
3. Broad in coverage:
- a. covers main aspects:
Needs work
- You include details on Ray's second Legion of Merit but no details on his first. Considering that you gave details for both Silver Stars, and the Legion of Merit is a higher level award, I would think that the first would warrant at least a sentence or two of coverage.
- I have added this. I think the Silver Star is actually the higher award. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:06, 7 January 2013 (UTC)
- You include details on Ray's second Legion of Merit but no details on his first. Considering that you gave details for both Silver Stars, and the Legion of Merit is a higher level award, I would think that the first would warrant at least a sentence or two of coverage.
- b. focused/on topic: Acceptable
4. Neutral: Acceptable
5. Stable: Acceptable
6. Image use:
- a. license/tagging correct: Needs work
- The source for the image, "US Navy photograph", isn't really good enough. Source is more "where did you get it from", i.e. is it scanned from a book? taken from a website? personal collection? If there is more information about the author, that also should be included.
- Yeah, the photograph is from the my personal collection. I believe that it was one of a series of photographs of senior Naval officers taken in Australia in 1943. You can see he has his Silver Star but not yet the DSM of LoM. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:06, 7 January 2013 (UTC)
- Oh, I wouldn't know. I just assumed that LoM was higher because it was listed above Silver Star in the infobox. Sven Manguard Wha? 22:17, 7 January 2013 (UTC)
- Yeah, the photograph is from the my personal collection. I believe that it was one of a series of photographs of senior Naval officers taken in Australia in 1943. You can see he has his Silver Star but not yet the DSM of LoM. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:06, 7 January 2013 (UTC)
- The source for the image, "US Navy photograph", isn't really good enough. Source is more "where did you get it from", i.e. is it scanned from a book? taken from a website? personal collection? If there is more information about the author, that also should be included.
- b. relevant/properly captioned: Acceptable
7. Additional items not required for a GA, but requested by the reviewer:
- a. images that should have alt texts have them: Acceptable
- b. general catch all and aesthetics: Acceptable
Comments after the initial review: Nothing too serious. Should take about 10 minutes to get this into GA shape. I like doing GAN reviews for you MilHist people, you don't make me work very hard. This is also Sven Manguard 19:21, 7 January 2013 (UTC)
- Looks good to me. Promoting now. Sven Manguard Wha? 22:17, 7 January 2013 (UTC)