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"is a song released by English group" → "is a song by English rock band" with the target
"it was first released as a single on 2 June 1967 through" → "it was released as a single on 2 June 1967, through" with the target
"which was their debut" → "which was the band's debut" though this is not sourced properly in the body, as you did mention about the debut but did not properly reference this song being it
"was also their first promoted" → "was their first promoted"
"who had released..." not notable for the lead
"As a result the single managed to reach number twelve in" → "The song reached number 12 on" per MOS:NUM and this should be the last sentence of this para
"It marks a distinct turning point for the Small Faces career; it is their..." → "It marked a distinct turning point for Small Faces' career, being their..." but this sentence is not sourced properly in the body
"The subject regarding" → "The song's subject regarding"
Add a sentence after the above about the critical reception of the song
"managing to chart in the UK." maybe add the UK Singles Chart position here, something like "managing to chart at number 12 on the UK Singles Chart." maybe?
"for its' distinct outro," → "for its distinct outro,"
"similar to how they would" → "similar to how the band would" but this part of the sentence is not backed up anywhere in the body?
"one of Small Faces" → "one of Small Faces'"
"recordings, and, although it" → "recordings and, although it"
"the top-ten of the UK singles chart it ultimately led the Small Faces" → "the top 10 in the United Kingdom, the song ultimately led the band"
The bit about psychedelic songs throughout their career is not backed up and target psychedelic to Psychedelic music
"the single was eventually included on the US-only album" → "the song was eventually included on the United States-only album,"
"ten months after the single," → "ten months afterward,"
I do not think the first para is notable for this article so I am not going to look at its writing style in detail, though I may do if you can explain why it should remain
"had begun changing as well,[16][17] and the group's" → "had started changing,[16][17] and Small Faces'"
"on 11 May 1966 (the same day their debut album was released)." → "on 11 May 1966, the same day as the release of their debut studio album Small Faces."
"(who regularly visited the band[17])" → "a regular visitor to the band,[17]"
"visited the band at" → "visited Small Faces at"
"in Pimlico following a meeting" → "in Pimlico, following a meeting"
"There, Epstein passed" → "At the residence, Epstein passed"
"bad trip on the drug and eventually the group," → "bad trip under the drug and eventually Small Faces,"
"where he took a train" → "where he went on a train"
"Although they got" → "Although they had"
"for the Small Faces music." → "for the band's music."
"during this time, the began to grow bitter with their label" → "during the composing time, they began to grow bitter with their record label" with the wikilink
"who they felt" → "who the band felt"
"Because although he" → "The reason was because although he"
"released by the end of May that year." → "released later that same month." but can you mention the type of release since it wasn't a single, and are you sure it wasn't released in June of that year?
"This contrasts from" → "This was a contrast from"
Remove wikilink on "(Tell Me) Have You Ever Seen Me?"
"when May had eventually come," → "when May 1997 eventually came,"
It should be mentioned somewhere in this section about this single being there debut Immediate release, if not at this point then around the second para's start probably
"On 26 May," → "On 26 May of that year,"
"This release was" → "The release was"
"on the Small Faces success," → "on Small Faces' success,"
[37] should be solely at the end of the sentence
"the Small Faces chart success" → "the band's chart success"
[39] should be solely at the end of the sentence and it may be used alongside [54] to back up the first part, but in that case probably move them both to the end and maintain numerical order
"by the Small Faces, who, similarly to "I Can't Make It", did" → "by Small Faces; similarly to "I Can't Make It", they did"
Target chords to Chord (music) on the audio sample text and make sure it is backed up; there is no mention of the song's genre as psychedelic anywhere in the prose even? Also, target psychedelic to Psychedelic music.
"previous UK singles, along with some tracks from Small Faces" → "previous singles released in the United Kingdom and some tracks from the album"
"who the Small Faces had previously worked with making" → "who Small Faces had previously worked with when making"
Add release years of "Just Passing" and "Lazy Sunday" in brackets, or maybe write it before the title for the former so it's less cluttered when reading
"the Small Faces released," → "released by Small Faces,"
Add release year of the double album in brackets
"details the material recorded" → "details their material recorded"
"The single received mostly positive critical feedback from critics," → "The song was met with mostly positive feedback from music critics," with the target
"In their 3 June 1967 issue," → "In the magazine's 3 June 1967 issue,"
"of "Here Come the Nice" for" → "of "Here Come the Nice" that features Midge Ure and Glen Matlock for", moving the featuring info from its current position to here
"with Paul Weller also performing the song live." → "performing the song live with Paul Weller."
Personnel according to Here Comes The Nice: Immediate Years box set 1967-69. → Personnel according to the liner notes of Here Comes The Nice: Immediate Years box set 1967-69.
Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel.
Red links are considered fine for GAs, but I would like to question why are there ones on the first source when it is supposed to link to the book and publisher? I am questioning for verification the book is definitely correctly cited.
I've completely reworked the lead and infobox section, and I'd appreciate it if you could take a look at it once again. Regarding the unbacked sentences, I will add them to the end of the "Reception and legacy" part of the article. Also note that English isn't my native tongue, which would explain some strange spelling mistakes found throughout the text. VirreFriberg (talk) 15:11, 14 December 2020 (UTC)Reply
VirreFriberg Thank you for the reworking, I will look at it and make comments below, and you are not supposed to create new sections on GA review pages, only sub-sections like above so I have merged your addition for you. It is understandable that your English may be somewhat weak if it's not your native language, however. --K. Peake16:37, 14 December 2020 (UTC)Reply
The second sentence should say "it was released..."
"It received praise and good reviews from British music magazines and press." → "The song received mostly positive reviews from music critics,..." and add after the comma a bit about what was praised
"one of Small Faces" is missing the apostrophe
The article has been tweaked after your suggestions, with only a few minor differences from the recommendations, such as incorporating years in brackets (1969) into the sentences "in 1969." at various points throughout the text. Regarding the opening paragraph of the background section, I included it to showcase the progress Small Faces had made up until that point, and introduce the reader to their previous records. Reading it now, it seems a little redundant, but I felt like it was necessary to introduce the reader to the band's background as rhythm and blues musicians. VirreFriberg (talk) 19:06, 14 December 2020 (UTC)Reply
Nice job on the tweaking, the minor differences you decided to implement do not cause issues with the prose and work as perfectly fine alternatives to what I suggested. However, I meant to propose for you to implement the reception change to saying "mostly positive" but just forgot the second word; I have done this change for you now. I also moved this to being a lesser sub-section, so it can be appropriately inbetween the last actual section of the article and the final comments of this review. --K. Peake08:02, 15 December 2020 (UTC)Reply
VirreFriberg Oh sorry, I did not realize you had covered numerous sections because I saw nothing marking the changes as done outside of the progress subsection about a partial area of the article on the review page so felt I didn't need to check the article. However, I'm out right now thus unable to give a read-through til later, but the first para of the opening section fails the focus criterion in my opinion because it is not sourced as being directly connected to the song and you should remove it, plus give the suggested changes a read-through yourself to make sure you've done them all maybe? --K. Peake17:28, 24 December 2020 (UTC)Reply
VirreFriberg Merry Christmas to you soon; I will reply to any comments made on the day even though I'll keep activity at a minimal rate, e.g not expanding articles or starting new reviews. I'm going to look through this article now and try to see if you've missed anything out apart from the opening section's first paragraph. --K. Peake20:56, 24 December 2020 (UTC)Reply
Kyle Peake I've implemented your suggested changes into the article, however, I removed the first book found in Sources, as it was not added by me, and as no footnotes refers to it, it's redundant.
Kyle Peake Now I've redone the suggested changes. However, note that the second WikiLink to Small Faces isn't the same to their debut album, which shares the same name. The Small Faces two first studio albums are eponymous which has led to some confusion. Regarding the charts, I think I did it correctly, although I am not 100% certain.
VirreFriberg You forgot to sign off so I did not get the notification, but the chart table was improved though still required changes which I did because they were only brief! However, why is the genre not written out in the body and why have you kept unsourced info on the audio sample's text? --K. Peake09:28, 26 December 2020 (UTC)Reply
VirreFriberg I did remove the overlink of AllMusic, though you have not written out in the comp and recording section that the song's genre is psychedelic pop. Also, sign off posts next time. --K. Peake15:56, 26 December 2020 (UTC)Reply