Talk:High Virgo/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by The Bushranger in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Sp33dyphil (talk · contribs) 23:11, 7 October 2011 (UTC)Reply

  • "The High Virgo missile, also" later in the sentence the definition is introduced.
  Done
  • Was Convair a manufacturer of the missile as well?
Yes - Lockheed built the missile itself, while Convair constructed the special pylon that mounted the missile to the B-58; they were officially co-contractors on the project.
  • Place ALBM after "air-launched ballistic missile"
  Done
  • First sentence of "Design and development" is too long, and requires a split.
  Done
  Done
  • Not sure, but shouldn't Lockheed Aircraft be replaced with the ungainly "Lockheed Missiles, Space, and Electronics Systems Group"?
No; at the time, it was simply "Lockheed Corporation" - I've changed the text to that.
  • "supersonic medium bomber" Medium-range?
No, it was a medium bomber in payload. I'll wikilink that.
  Done
  • Wikify "cruise missile"
  Done
  • utilized vs utilising I suggest using use
Went with the alternative "equipped".
  • "200 miles" Km measurement?
  Done
  • what does "ASAT" stand for? "Anti-satellite ..."?
Yes - I've clarified that.
  • Could the table in "Launch history" be merged into "Operation history"?
Not practically; it's kind of a supplement to the article, a la Bold Orion and other articles.
But wouldn't operational history include launches? I mean, if the thing didn't fly, then it wasn't considered operational. I'm trying to keep things "tight". Sp33dyphil "Ad astra" 07:23, 8 October 2011 (UTC)Reply
Hm, I can see your point, but I prefer to keep them seperate, if it's not a big deal. I may modify the table some though for better appearance. - The Bushranger One ping only 08:02, 8 October 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • References for specifications?
  Done, also refined some of the specs
  • Why did the missile fall out of favour?
It didn't; it was intended all along as strictly a R&D project. I've added a sentence at the end to clarify that.
Hopefully that clears things up? Thanks for the review! :) - The Bushranger One ping only 23:53, 7 October 2011 (UTC)Reply
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
Thanks! :) - The Bushranger One ping only 08:02, 8 October 2011 (UTC)Reply