Talk:Highland cattle/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 10:41, 26 April 2015 (UTC)

• I propose to take on this review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:41, 26 April 2015 (UTC)

First reading

Here are a few preliminary comments:

• The lead section is very brief. It should provide a summary of the information provided elsewhere in the article.
• The word "cattle" is a plural word meaning a number of bovine animals, and the caption "A Highland cattle in the Highlands" for example, uses the word wrongly.  Done
• The article needs a "description" section.  Done
• Several of the things mentioned in the infobox need expansion in the text.  Done
• The second paragraph of the "The breed" section has no citations.  Done
• The section "Commercial use" has no citations.  Done
• The sections "Commercial use" and "Commercial success" immediately attracted my attention. They are written in a rather sophisticated style, different from other parts of the article, and seem to be a copyvio of this site, or alternatively they both may be copyvios of some previously-existing work.  Done

• • I think the article needs quite a lot of improvement before it will reach the standards required for a GA. The copyvios are the most serious fault. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:01, 26 April 2015 (UTC)
  • I can see that the copyvios predate your involvement with the article. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 12:28, 26 April 2015 (UTC)
• What do you mean by description? Is is 'the breed? TheMagikCow (talk) 14:15, 26 April 2015 (UTC)

I meant the breed characteristics - the sort of things dealt with in the articles Murray Grey cattle and Belted Galloway. Such things as their size, build, coat, horns, growth rate, age to maturity, temperament, milking ability, etc. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 17:44, 26 April 2015 (UTC)

• @Cwmhiraeth: Is the article better now?

• Yes indeed, the article is much improved. A few further points
• I doubt the first image is a bull. It has no ring in its nose and looks more like a heifer or steer to me. See the bull illustrated on this page for comparison.  Done
• The NWHCA site just mentioned has a bit more information on the history of the breed.  Done
• The black cattle pictured are probably not bulls either.  Done
• The "Shows" section is hardly worth having but if you want to keep it, there is a typo in the last sentence.  Done
• The "External links" section lists a number of countries with highland cattle societies and it would be good to include information in the article on other countries where they are kept.  Done
• References should go immediately behind punctuation marks without an intervening space.  Done
  • Nearly there! Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:00, 28 April 2015 (UTC)
• @Cwmhiraeth: Fingers Crossed! TheMagikCow (talk) 15:40, 28 April 2015 (UTC)

GA criteria

• I have done some copyediting and changed the capitalisation, and I think the article is now sufficiently well-written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
• The article uses many reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. However, the citations should be fuller (I have done a couple) and an accessdate should be given for the date you visited websites.
• I do not believe the article contains original research.
• The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.
• The article is neutral.
• The article is stable.
• The images are relevant and have suitable captions, and are properly licensed.

• Final assessment - Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:59, 1 May 2015 (UTC)