Talk:History of education in Wales (1939–present)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Llewee (talk · contribs) 14:40, 2 September 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: It is a wonderful world (talk · contribs) 20:30, 19 September 2024 (UTC)

Hello It is a wonderful world, I was planning to nominate History of education in Wales, the overview article for the four, after these articles had been reviewed. If you want to review the entire set then I could nominate it now. I understand that the four are already a big undertaking and you might prefer to leave it.--Llewee (talk) 22:09, 19 September 2024 (UTC)

Hi Llewee, I have quite a lot of free time over the next few week, so would love to review it.

You could also consider making the lot a good topic, though the criteria for that highly recommends adding a template to link each article together. It is a wonderful world (talk) 10:54, 20 September 2024 (UTC)

Ok, thank you. I have now nominated it.--Llewee (talk) 21:32, 20 September 2024 (UTC)

Criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

First sentence in the lead suffers from MOS:REDUNDANCY

I have already described the general grammatical and MoS mistakes in the previous GA reviews on this topic. I fixed invalid uses of semi-colons, spaces around em-dashes etc.

However, very few of the technical schools were opened. They faced various difficulties which were common to both England and Wales: I think a little summary of the difficulties would be appropriate here

Additionally in Wales, where academic secondary education had been seen as an ideal since the 19th century, there was a particular lack of respect for vocational education: This is the first time vocational education is mentioned, so it lacks context. Was vocational education used by a particular school type, where was vocational education happening?

The Aberfan disaster destroyed a village junior school in 1966, killing many children: Many can be replaced with the actual number, 116.

They might attend separate infant and junior schools, departments or a combined primary school: I don't think the term primary school should be used here, it seems like it wasn't used at the time, as it isn't used in the source. It also confused me until I read the source, because it's not clear whether the following paragraphs are talking about practices only separate infant and junior schools did, or practices primary schools did too.

If "infants" is referring to infant schools, and "juniors" to junior schools, that terminology is not clear, is that terminology is common in Wales?

At age 7 children moved into juniors: Only infant school children did this, so perhaps "At age 7, infant school children moved into junior schools" is better?

The following paragraph treats infant school -> junior school as the only pathway, did combined primary schools follow the same practices?

those that used Welsh as the primary language of instruction in the infants school tended to achieve similar levels of attainment in Welsh by the end of primary school among pupils of all backgrounds: Should it be "infant schools" rather than "infants school"?

The postwar period saw a rapid expansion of higher education establishments especially in the study of science and technology. This was a result of the Cold War: Surely these effects cannot all be attributed to the aftermath of the Cold War.

This was a result of the Cold War, a desire for Britain to remain a great power after the end of the empire and economic competition from abroad: The sentence structure makes it seem like "a desire for Britain..." is the definition of the Cold War. Rather, the Cold War caused the people of Britain to feel this way.

The last we heard of women's inclusion in universities was in the previous article when they were banned from studying music. When they were included into university courses definitely needs to be added.

There should also be an update into girl's experiences in schools nearer the present day, the final update is that the traditional view of women had an influence on the modern type secondary schools, but this (in my opinion) is far removed from how they are viewed in schools today.

There are some quotes which require inline references. Hitting CTRL+F and searching the " symbol allows you to check them all quickly

Sources

Great range of sources again!

[1]: No problems

[5]: Content seems to be fully supported by pages 154 and 155, not pages 144-154.

[6]: No problems

[10]: No problems

[15]: No problems

[17]: No problems

[20]: No problems

[26]: No problems

[28]: No problems

[36]: No problems

[46]: Should reference page 368, not 338

[50]: No problems

[53]: Source is in Welsh, so I assume the quotation was originally in Welsh? If so it should follow the guidelines at MOS:FOREIGNQUOTE.

[63]: No problems

[73]: No problems

[77]: No problems

[78]: No problems

[80]: No problems

[87]: No problems

[90]: No problems

Images

All are appropriately licensed, captions are good and article is well illustrated.