Talk:History of fluorine/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 05:08, 4 October 2013 (UTC)

I'll start this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 05:08, 4 October 2013 (UTC)

• Consolidate the lede into no more than two paragraphs.
• Add mention of the name fluorspar to the lede.
• There is generally no reason for single-sentence paragraphs.
• Ensure that there is at least one paragraph per sentence and add cites where needed.
• This is awkward: Some instances of ancient use of fluorite, main source mineral of fluorine, for ornamental use carvings exist.
• The images are interesting, but they leave a hell of a lot of empty space. Try to rearrange them, or use fewer sections, which will help to reduce the amount of white space.
• Image of Frémy needs a US PD tag.
• No DABs, external links OK.
• You have a mix of title case and not in the citations and references, pick one or the other.
• What's the copyright status of the video? I can only get it to play, not check anything else.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:08, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

[placeholder, will do and respond tomorrow argh, that was overoptimistic. Friday. Double sharp (talk) 14:08, 9 October 2013 (UTC)] Double sharp (talk) 11:36, 8 October 2013 (UTC)

@Sturmvogel: I'm sorry, but I seem to be having irregular editing time for now; could you give me another week and a half for this? (Worst case scenario. I can probably finish it earlier.) Double sharp (talk) 01:59, 13 October 2013 (UTC)

I'll give your to the end of the month.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:21, 13 October 2013 (UTC)

Kill review. It's not ready man. Needs fundamental fleshing out.

SV, thanks for the time, man. Minor teaching: a STRING of one sentence paras is a bad idea. But "never have a one sentence para" is completely wrong. Occasions when it makes sense is in dialog (or the entrée to a quote), for selective emphasis and transition or when the structure requires it (e.g. if I discuss A/B/C/D at para length and have only a sentence worth of content for B.) [Wiki is even worse with the lack of unity in paragraphs, arbitrary glomming together, or 200 word+ monstrosities.] See google search When should I use a one sentence paragraph. 98.117.75.177 (talk) 17:25, 13 October 2013 (UTC)

What's the status here? Almost nothing's been done with the article. I'll give you another week before I fail it as non-responsive.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:00, 23 October 2013 (UTC)

Failed as non-responsive--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:30, 31 October 2013 (UTC)