Talk:Hobitit/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 03:47, 20 January 2022 (UTC)

• Link television miniseries.
  • Surely not worth linking such a common and self-explanatory term.
• The lead's quite short, could be expanded with reception, production, etc.
  • Extended
• "adapts quite faithfully the events until" → "adapts the events in the book faithfully until"
  • Fixed.
• Hobbits should be capitalized, this needs to be done throughout the article.
  • Fixed.
• Add Frodo and Sam's last names
  • Done.
• "The series is divided into nine episodes" → Maybe move this later into the paragraph, after mentioning what the series is based on.
  • Done.
• Link War of the Ring.
  • Done.
• Add Merry and Pippin's last names, and maybe specify that these are their nicknames.
  • Added; not sure this article is that place for talking about nicknames.
• "the Barrow-wight" → "a Barrow-wight"?
  • All right; only one is ever encountered but there must once have been many.
• Link Fellowship of the Ring at first mention instead of second.
  • Done.
• Link Orc.
  • Done.
• "Gandalf apparently dies." → " Gandalf apparently dies in a fight with a Balrog." Since you mention the Balrog later.
  • Done.
• It isn't mentioned that Strider is actually Aragorn.
  • Added.
• "new family-produced" → Is this necessary? Also, what does family-produced mean?
  • Yes, it's a distinctive feature. It just means "produced by members of a family", as it sounds.
• "such as" → "including"
  • OK for variety, it's not exactly better.

• Nice work here overall. AryKun (talk) 07:55, 20 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Many thanks, all done to date. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)