Talk:Hobo's/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gerald Waldo Luis (talk · contribs) 17:34, 13 December 2020 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article. Shorts should be promoted within a while. GeraldWL 17:34, 13 December 2020 (UTC)

Thanks! ---Another Believer _(Talk) 18:52, 13 December 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• "before closing during the COVID-19 pandemic in 2020." No need for "in 2020," as the pandemic is on 2020. On some devices the "2020" is also placed in a new, weird line. GeraldWL 02:23, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

   Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 02:29, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

Description

• "located at 120 Northwest 3rd Avenue in downtown Portland's Old Town Chinatown. The establishment also served as a starting point for tours of the Shanghai tunnels." This is supported by 3 citations, one of them is a bundle of two. So there are a whopping four references. Can you relocate the citations, or remove unneeded ones? GeraldWL 04:35, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

   Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:44, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

• Maybe it is meaningless, but it would be a friendly gesture if we link "chi-chi" to wiktionary:chichi. GeraldWL 04:35, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  I'm not really sure when linking to wiktionary is necessary. I would just encourage readers to look up the definition of a word if needed. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:43, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

• Link city council? GeraldWL 04:35, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  I've linked to Government of Portland, Oregon, which is more specific. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:45, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

• "The tunnels were accessed by a trapdoor and stairs to the restaurant's basement" Supported by three citations. Seemed too much: mind addressing? GeraldWL 04:35, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  I want to push back here. In this case, I feel all three sources are used to come up with the article's current wording, which is why I included quotes from all three sources to demonstrate how they've been used to justify use of "trapdoor", "stairs", and "basement". ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:46, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

• "Reed said the "spacious" restaurant had an "extensive" dinner menu"-- suggest remodel to "The restaurant, which Reed called it "spacious," had an "extensive" dinner menu" GeraldWL 04:35, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  I don't think "which Reed called it "spacious"..." is grammatically correct. I prefer the current wording. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:47, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  Another Believer, I checked the grammar-- apparently, it is grammatically correct without the "it." GeraldWL 05:53, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  Gerald Waldo Luis,  Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:56, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

History

• "used Hobo's as an entrance to the tunnels, as of 2002–2010." Supported by three references. Again, seemed too much, given the shortness of this claim. GeraldWL 04:35, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  Gerald Waldo Luis, I wanted to give sources for the time span. Hobo's has a lengthy history so I think the dates are helpful for noting when Jones used the space for tours. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:49, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  Seems like a good reasoning. GeraldWL 05:51, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

• Seems like "scallops" has not been linked. Recommend linking. GeraldWL 04:40, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

   Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:49, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

• "and collect some compelling visual evidence" is a very debatable claim. Suggest changing "according to" to "as claimed by."

   Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:51, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

Reception

• "Amanda Waldroupe of Willamette Week wrote" Perhaps have "that" after it? GeraldWL 04:40, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

   Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:52, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

• "In Moon Portland"-- suggest adding "the book" ("In the book Moon Portland...") GeraldWL 04:40, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

   Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 05:52, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  Another Believer, from there it has passed the GA criteria in my lens. Since the image has not been reduced, I will put this  On hold until it is reduced: in the meantime, feel free to add new things and improve the article. If I see one I'll also copyedit it. GeraldWL 06:29, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  Gerald Waldo Luis, Thanks! ---Another Believer _(Talk) 15:24, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

  Gerald Waldo Luis, The image has been reduced. Thanks! ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:24, 16 December 2020 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.