Talk:Holly Holliday/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zanimum (talk · contribs) 21:36, 5 July 2013 (UTC) Okay, I'm going to take this article on.

Development

• What about "The role of Holly was created by series co-creator Ryan Murphy, specifically for Paltrow, a personal friend. Murphy suggested that"
  • Done Robin (talk) 17:53, 6 July 2013 (UTC)
• The sentence about Glee: The 3D Concert Movie sort of runs on. Can you think of any info that could be dropped, or can you split it into two sentences?
  • Dropped some info. Robin (talk) 17:53, 6 July 2013 (UTC)

I've made a few edits in this section, that can be seen in the edit summaries.

Musical performances

• There's enough prose between the first references to Mr. Poniewozik, that people would have to hunt to find out who he is. Thus, I've repeated his outlet.
• Can you at least make reference to how "Forget You" is sanitized? A decade from now, people might be watching that episode of Glee, and using this article as a reference guide, but never have heard Cee-lo perform it.
  • Better? Robin (talk) 17:53, 6 July 2013 (UTC)
• Would it help readers to reference the source of the term "hairography"? I can see people be tripped up, even though it's mostly defined by the rest of the sentence.
  • No, I don't think so + "hairography" directs to the season one Glee episode of the same name.
• Landslide is linked to from both Storylines and Musical performances. Turning Tables is linked to from only Storylines. Which is the standard, or even your personal standard? There is a fair distance between the first and second instances of the link/would-be link.
  • I've unlinked Landslide, having always followed the template of only linking in the first reference. Robin (talk) 17:53, 6 July 2013 (UTC)

Okay, so that's it for today, more possibly Saturday. -- Zanimum (talk) 21:36, 5 July 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for taking this one! Robin (talk) 17:53, 6 July 2013 (UTC)

(After you reply to any questions/concerns for those two sections, they'll both be ready for GA. I picked those sections at random, but I presume the others will be similarly easy-breasy. -- Zanimum (talk) 21:38, 5 July 2013 (UTC))

Critical reception

• The NAMI reference needs to be filled out more, to say who published the page they're clicking on. (It's unfortunate I can't find any news outlets cover this, but not a deal breaker for GA.)
  • This has been done by BlueMoonset. Robin (talk) 01:13, 10 July 2013 (UTC)

Yeah, I'll do another read through the whole way through tonight, but I think that's it. -- Zanimum (talk) 18:44, 6 July 2013 (UTC)

Great stuff, I've read through again and nothing more needs to be said. Pass! -- Zanimum (talk) 00:48, 12 July 2013 (UTC)