Talk:Holly Steam Combination Company/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:37, 21 August 2020 (UTC)
Shall review this article. MWright96 (talk) 20:37, 21 August 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead
edit- "was an American company that was the first steam heating company" - try to avoid repetition of the same word in the same sentence
- Mention who Birdsill Holly was for the uninitiated
- Perhaps expand the lead to state what happened to the company in its final years
History
edit- "Birdsill Holly began working on a district steam system" - same issue as the second point in the lead section
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:49, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- " The following year Holly then constructed" - I don't believe the word "then" is needed here
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:49, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- "The system of 3 miles of supply" - how about using the [convert: needs a number] template on the text in bold?
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:49, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- "This heating system had a greater energy efficiency than the method then in use of individual boilers to heat individual buildings. The new heating system concept attracted the attention of interested investors." - consider merging these two sentences together
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- "This heating system had a greater energy efficiency than the method then in use of individual boilers" - method of using
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- "The Holly heating systems first used wood insulated pipe.[9] The steam was distributed using high duty pumping engines.[10]" - perhaps merging these two sentences might help matters?
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- "He ultimately obtained over 150 patents by 1888 refining steam heat techniques and methods of distribution." - the text in bold might be better off placed at the start or end of this sentence
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Wikilink Brush Swan Electric Light Company to the relevant article
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- "By 1894 the Holly steam systems had been installed in over" - more than
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Maybe this source [1] has additional information that can be inserted into the article?
- Done Expanded article. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:23, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
Demise
edit- "The Holly Steam Combination Company was reorganized in 1882. It became then the American District Steam Company (ADSC)." - these two sentences could be better off merged as one
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:39, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
Sources
edit- "Heating and ventilating magazine Company" - the words in bold should begin with capital letters
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:39, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 11:03, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- @MWright96: - All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:39, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- @Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. I've made changes to the new source added into the article. MWright96 (talk) 16:40, 22 August 2020 (UTC)