Talk:Homalinotus coriaceus/GA1
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Reviewer: Etriusus (talk · contribs) 16:42, 20 September 2023 (UTC)
Grabbing the review.
Less than 5k bytes, only 4 edits total, two edits by the nominator. Bold move. 🏵️Etrius ( Us) 16:42, 20 September 2023 (UTC)
Well, I was going to be nice about this and just quickfail this for obvious broadness issues. That was until I found the lines From this source:
- "The coconut cluster borer is a black beetle, measuring 25 to 30 mm in length (Ferreira et al. 2002a), in addition to a rostrum measuring around 8 mm (Gallo et al. 2002), whose females differ little from males, being slightly larger and presenting two slightly pronounced depressions in the pronotum. The eggs are white, smooth and oblong, and are laid on the floral peduncle... The fully developed larvae measure 40 mm to 50 mm in length, are curved, white in color and have a rusty head (Bondar 1940). "
- "This pest is one of the most important coleoborers in coconut cultivation in Brazil, causing, according to Gomes(1992), a reduction of around 50% in coconut production. The damage is caused by the larvae, which dig galleries in the floral peduncle, interrupting the sap flow and promoting the fall of flowers and fruits (Ferreira et al. 1998). Adults are also harmful to coconut trees because, when feeding, they tear the tissue of flowers and young fruits, drying them (Ferreira et al. 1997)"
Seems awfully similar to your line:
- "The black coconut bunch weevil is a black-colored beetle, measuring 25 to 30 mm in length.[3] In addition to a rostrum about 8 mm long, the females differ little from the males, being slightly larger and having two faint depressions on the pronotum. The eggs are white, smooth, and oblong, with laying occurring on the floral peduncle.[4] The fully developed larvae measure from 40 mm to 50 mm in length, are curved, white in color, and have a rust-colored head.[5]"
- "This pest is one of the main weevils affecting coconut cultivation in Brazil, causing a reduction of around 50% in coconut production.[6] The damage is inflicted by the larvae, which bore tunnels into the floral peduncle, disrupting the sap flow and leading to the drop of flowers and fruits.[7] Adult beetles are also harmful to coconut trees because, when feeding, they tear apart the tissues of new flowers and fruits, causing them to dry out.[8]"
@André Ribeiro Cardoso: Now, I get that you're newer to Wikipedia, but WP:Closeparaphrasing and a violation of WP:CV, a very serious offense. This entire article is just close paraphrasing/a one-to-one translation. I used Google Translate and got nearly identical passages to what you wrote. I am going to blank the page at this time, only leaving the lead.
Even if you translate a page, you cannot be this word-for-word with your writing. Instead of failing you, I am going to request that you provide an explanation/come forward with any other instances of close paraphrasing. I would prefer to handle this here rather than escalating but I do expect you be honest with me, I'm going to WP:AGF at the moment. 🏵️Etrius ( Us) 18:55, 20 September 2023 (UTC)
- @Etriusus Hello and thank you for the review. I am sincerely sorry for my errors, im a student of biology and i like to indentify species that i see on my day-to-day life and the ones that don't have a wikipedia page i try to create a basic lead about them, etc. But, on this case i found a lot of information on the internet and it was already on the wikipedia language type, so i just transcribed it in other words. If you can help me, how can i cite information and use information from papers without copying it? Like the description of the morphology of the beetle, that is nothing to change about it; I know that the main error is that the WHOLE text is very similar but I would just like suggestions. Again, im sorry for it and i would like to improve my writing, since this will contribute for my personal construction. André Ribeiro Cardoso (talk) 19:13, 20 September 2023 (UTC)
- @André Ribeiro Cardoso, I'm glad it's not an intentional thing.
- For clarification, it's not so much that its similar. WP:CV has provisions for simple phrases and proper nouns, WP:LIMITED is an important caveat. This issue here is that both paragraphs are structured exactly to the source in question. You can't just insert synonyms and call it good.
- Original line:
- "This pest is one of the most important coleoborers in coconut cultivation in Brazil, causing, according to Gomes(1992), a reduction of around 50% in coconut production. The damage is caused by the larvae, which dig galleries in the floral peduncle, interrupting the sap flow and promoting the fall of flowers and fruits (Ferreira et al. 1998). Adults are also harmful to coconut trees because, when feeding, they tear the tissue of flowers and young fruits, drying them (Ferreira et al. 1997)"
- You could rewrite this as:
- Due to the damage H. coriaceus can inflict on coconut trees, it is considered a major pest in Brazil. Larvae will tunnel into the peduncles of the coconut tree, feeding on the sap. Likewise, adults will often damage the flowers and fruit. Both life states of H. coriaceus promote the death of the fruit and flowers of the coconut tree, and H. coriaceus is estimated to have reduced coconut production in Brazil by 50%.
- Now, I understand that this is a back-of-the-napkin summary (I'm not super well versed in this species) but I think this enunciates my point. You can still include the information, but you need to repackage it so that you're not just copying wholesale. 🏵️Etrius ( Us) 19:35, 20 September 2023 (UTC)