Talk:Homer Loves Flanders/GA1
GA Review
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My review
editUnder Plot:
My biggest problem with this article is that the entire plot summary feels a little thin to me. Could you look it over and maybe try to expand it and flesh it out a bit by adding some more details. For example, how does Homer start annoying Flanders before the camping trip starts? What prompts Flanders to yell at Homer in church? What prompts Homer to again become annoyed by Flanders at the end of the episode? Stuff like that...
- I have expanded it a bit now. It is not revealed in the episode what "prompts Homer to again become annoyed by Flanders at the end of the episode", though.
Under Production:
I"m guessing you don't know, otherwise you probably would have included it, but do you have any idea what actress David Richardson was dating when he wrote this? If you can find that and include it, that would be great, as the curiosity is killing me. lol. If you can't, no biggie...
- Sorry, I don't know who she is. ;P
I'm not sure exactly what you mean by "do the 'switch'"? I'm guessing you mean switching between the two characters getting along, and them not getting along, but it's a bit unclear and awkwardly written. Can you reword that to be a bit more clear, and remove the "fun" and "switch" single quotes while you're at it?
And, once again, remember what I said about "single" word quotes and the word that. ;) --Hunter Kahn (talk) 02:13, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. I think I got everything! :) TheLeftorium 09:59, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
GA pass
editA good article is:
- Well-written: Prose has improved, manual of style guidelines are good.
- Factually accurate and verifiable: Sources are good, no original research.
- Broad in its coverage: Addresses main aspects of topic, no unnecessary detail.
- Neutral: Yes.
- Stable: Yes.
- Illustrated, if possible, by images: Yes. And on a personal note, any Simpsons article with an Edward G. Robinson picture is fine by me! :D
That's a pass. Well done. --Hunter Kahn (talk) 19:57, 17 February 2009 (UTC)