Talk:Homer vs. Lisa and the 8th Commandment/GA1
Latest comment: 14 years ago by Theleftorium in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 04:41, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
Hi. I'll be reviewing this article as part of the April GAN Backlog Elimination Drive. This article is in great shape, but until the below minor issues are fixed, I'm placing it on hold. The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 04:41, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
Lead
edit- It'd be better if you include what number the episode is overall (i.e., "...and the 26th episode overall")
Plot
edit- Wikilink $ to US Dollar.
- "as long as he likes" → "as long as he desires"
- In the last paragraph: "a much-anticipated boxing match in which Drederick Tatum will challenge for the World Heavyweight Championship." Do you mean fight for the Championship?
- Not sure what you mean. Theleftorium 09:27, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
- As in, in stead of "Tatum with challenge for the Championship," say "Tatum will fight for the Championship." The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 15:37, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
- Not sure what you mean. Theleftorium 09:27, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
- "[...]all of his friends to come over and watch[...]" -> "over to watch"
- That would cause repetition of the word "to". Theleftorium 09:27, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
Production
edit- Is that Moses picture really necessary?
- Done Removed. Theleftorium 09:31, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
- In the DVD commentary for "The Homer They Fall," I seem to recall Weinstein saying that Tatum was named after a kid he knew in school. Am I correct?
Cultural references
edit- In stead of "looks exactly like Don King," I say it should be worded, "strongly resembles Don King"
- Burns is not mentioned in the plot, so wikilink to his name.
- The bit about the films they watch should be before the Broadcast News reference.
- Done (all of them) Theleftorium 09:31, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
Reception
edit- Nodda. Nice work.
Images
edit- Two PD images, on FU image which seems fine.
Final say
edit- Everything's fine. Passing. Nice job! The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 17:40, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks a lot for the review! :) Theleftorium 19:57, 3 April 2010 (UTC)