Talk:Hope Is Important

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Tenryuu in topic GOCE copyedit request

<^>v!!This album is connected!!v<^>

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GOCE copyedit request

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  • The band released the mini album Captain in January 1998; it was intended as a single for Deceptive Records, which grew into a full-length. Wikilinks removed. [F]ull-length seems to be missing a word; maybe it's LP or something similar? —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:20, 4 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Should be mini album, per the Dotmusic ref. I think I had mini album mixed with full-length by accident when writing. Yeepsi (talk) 08:10, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  Done. Reiterated that it's a mini album. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:10, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Further attention from their live performances, which included tours with Midget and the Warm Jets, saw the band sign with Food Records. Wikilinks removed. Did [f]urther attention allow the band to sign with the label, influence them, or some other verb? "Saw" in this context tends to be used journalistically and I think another verb would work better. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:20, 4 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
The attention allowed the band to sign. Would "Publicity from their live performances, [...] resulted in the band signing with Food Records" be better? Yeepsi (talk) 08:10, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  Done. Using requester's suggested wording. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:11, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • The song talks about the times the band used to visit the club The Egg during the Britpop era, which Woomble disliked. Just checking, did Woomble dislike the club or the Britpop era? As it is it sounds like the latter. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:20, 4 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Britpop era. Would "...Britpop era, a period that Woomble disliked" be better? Yeepsi (talk) 08:10, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  Done. Using requester's suggested wording. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:15, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Woomble came up with its lyrics while at their rehearsal space in Tollcross, Edinburgh, and were influenced by arguments he was having with his girlfriend. Wikilinks removed. Was it the lyrics were influenced by the arguments? —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:20, 4 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
The lyrics were influenced by the arguments. Yeepsi (talk) 08:10, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  Done. Switched fragment around. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:16, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Alongside this, he felt detachment; part of the lyrics namecheck Syd Barrett as a friend of Woomble's would laugh upon hearing the former's voice. Already edited. Not sure what is meant here; Woomble felt detached, so he namechecked Barrett and would laugh when he heard Barrett's voice? I'm not sure what the connection between feeling detached and laughing at a friend's voice is. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:20, 4 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
I think dropping the detachment part altogether would be best. Yeepsi (talk) 08:10, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  Done. Removed. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:17, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Its title paraphrases Andy Warhol, which he would say after arriving at a party. Wikilink removed. This sentence doesn't make sense as there's a noun belonging to Warhol missing; what is it? Catchphrase, saying, something else? —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:20, 4 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
A catchphrase. Yeepsi (talk) 08:10, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  Done. Added catchphrase after Warhol. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:18, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Yeah that'd be better. Yeepsi (talk) 08:10, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  Done. Merged those three sentences together at the end. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:26, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • The music video for "When I Argue I See Shapes" was directed by James and Alex. Who are these people? James could be referring to Anderson, but no one has been called Alex anywhere in the article. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:20, 4 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
James and Alex is the moniker for two filmmakers. I'm not sure what their full names are, but that's what they go by according to [1], and per the source used.Yeepsi (talk) 08:10, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  Done. Mentioned that they're a filmmaker duo to introduce them better. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:29, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Looking forward to your responses! —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:20, 4 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

@Tenryuu: I replied. Yeepsi (talk) 08:10, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Going to look at this one more time later. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 22:29, 5 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Alright, I think that's everything on my end! —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 07:03, 6 October 2021 (UTC)Reply