Talk:Horace Silver/GA1
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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 17:31, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
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- " Their Horace Silver and the Jazz Messengers album contained Silver's first hit, "The Preacher"." -what year was this?
- The track was recorded in 1955. I don't have a date for the original 10" release that contained "The Preacher". Horace Silver and the Jazz Messengers was released in 1956. I go for the jazz discography system of using the recording date. Is the current "mid-1950s", with his leaving the band in 1956, sufficient? EddieHugh (talk) 13:31, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Silver left Blue Note after 28 years, founded his own record label," -which was?
- Probably not worth mentioning here, as almost no-one will know about it and as far as I know it was just for his own recordings. EddieHugh (talk) 13:31, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
- ". Many of his varied repertoire of songs became jazz standards that are still widely played." -such as?
- Added three examples. EddieHugh (talk) 13:31, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
- Early life
- Correct link to Nat King Cole
- Done. EddieHugh (talk) 13:36, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Silver graduated from St. Mary's Grammar School in 1943.[12]" -new paragraph needed
- Good point. EddieHugh (talk) 13:36, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
- Later life
Not sure how 1950 could be described as "later life". I would simply change to Career.
- This dates back to when another reviewer asked me to inocorporate a Personal life section into a Career section. It makes sense to me, so a heading that incorporates both 'life' and 'career' is needed. I've used "Later life and career" for a while, to contrast with "Early life" while including "Career". Suggestions for better alternatives are welcome. EddieHugh (talk) 13:55, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
- " at a club in Hartford" -do we know the name?
- Some sources mention a name, but, from memory, they're not consistent. EddieHugh (talk) 13:55, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
- "and, the following year, by Art Farmer, Miles Davis, Milt Jackson and others.[24]" -is "by" the right word here?
- Sort of... added a few words to try to improve that bit. EddieHugh (talk) 13:55, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Silver was also busy recording as a sideman. In 1953, he was pianist on sessions led by Sonny Stitt, Howard McGhee, and Al Cohn, and, the following year, by Art Farmer, Miles Davis, Milt Jackson and others.[24] He also" -rep of "also"
- Cut the second one. EddieHugh (talk) 13:55, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
The rest looks fine, but I would like to see some examples of standards he was known for. Perhaps the compositions section could be altered to include standards.♦ Dr. Blofeld 13:03, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
- There are now three stated explicitly in the lead, where "The Preacher" also appears. "Doodlin'" and "Peace" are described in Compositions, as is "Opus de Funk", which I didn't find an explicit "this is a jazz standard" statement for. I could more bluntly state in Compositions that the first two are (someone has described them as) jazz standards.
- Yes, that would be fine.
- Thank you for another review. Updates are indented above. EddieHugh (talk) 14:07, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
- There are now three stated explicitly in the lead, where "The Preacher" also appears. "Doodlin'" and "Peace" are described in Compositions, as is "Opus de Funk", which I didn't find an explicit "this is a jazz standard" statement for. I could more bluntly state in Compositions that the first two are (someone has described them as) jazz standards.
Thanks for the prompt response.
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- Pass or Fail: ♦ Dr. Blofeld 17:13, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
Excellent job, a sound overall article.♦ Dr. Blofeld 17:17, 18 March 2016 (UTC)