Talk:Hot (Inna song)/GA2
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 22:36, 18 December 2017 (UTC)
- Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 22:36, 18 December 2017 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- I would change “first single” to “lead single”.
- I would change “a hook” to “the hook” and add a link for “hook”.
- Do we know the name of the person who provides the “male vocals”?
- It's probably one guy from Play & Win, but no source supports this information, so no, we don't know that, unfortunately. Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:48, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- I would change “while nominated for an Eska Music Award in the same year” to “while it was nominated for an Eska Music Award in the same year”.
- I am not sure what you mean by this “while the second was meant to emphasize Inna's image”. Her image as what?
- The clip focuses solely on her looks and does not have a plot. This means that the clip enphasizes how beautiful and bad-ass she is
. Does that make any sense? Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:48, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- I am not a huge fan of the wording, but since it is from a source, I will allow it. Aoba47 (talk) 19:01, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- The clip focuses solely on her looks and does not have a plot. This means that the clip enphasizes how beautiful and bad-ass she is
- Background and composition
- For this part (Adopting the stage name Alessandra in 2008, she approached a pop-rock style, which switched to "commercial" minimal-infused house music after changing her stage name to Inna.), I would avoid the repetition of “stage name” if possible.
- I don't know any other words for "stage name". Do you? Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:48, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- I having difficulty with this as well so I will let it stand. Aoba47 (talk) 19:01, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- For this (On another occasion, Inna stated that the track emerged "out of a fun”), I think you are missing something. A fun what?
- I think that expression does exist. It emerged out of messing around with sounds and beats → ...out of a fun
- @Cartoon network freak: That is not an expression in English, at least to the best of my knowledge. I also could not fund this supported in the source. Could you point this out to me? Aoba47 (talk) 19:04, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- @Aoba47: Romanian: Dintr-o joaca, insa, s-a nascut o piesa dance. → However, out of fun, a dance song was born. Maybe it does sound better without the "a" in "out of a fun"? Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:08, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- I would remove the "a" and then I will pass it. Aoba47 (talk) 19:09, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- Reception and accolades
- Rather than using this phrase (, who discovered the track late,), I would just identify the year in which the review was written if it is important to note.
- I just removed this, as it does not add much to the article. Other reviews were also written in that year. Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:48, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- I would link Ibiza?
- For this sentence (However, he negatively viewed the sense of its lyrics, comparing them to crosswords and jokingly stating that Inna was "more of a Sudoku girl”.), I would clarify that the critic is talking about how the lyrics are somewhat randomly thrown together. The quote is good, but some further clarity would be helpful for this part.
Done Is that better now? Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:48, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- I would suggest making the more mixed/negative reviews into its own paragraph.
- I would move the awards/nominations parts near the positive reception towards the song as it is rather odd to go from reading negative reviews to awards/nominations information.
- Commercial performance
- Everything looks good here.
- Thank you!! Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:48, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- True Love Edit
- For this part (It was also known as the "True Love Edit" after its release on YouTube.), I would remove “also”.
- Dancing in the Dark Edit
- For this part (It was also known as the "Dancing in the Dark Edit" during its release on YouTube.), I would remove “also”.
- Live performances and other usage
- For this part (The first appearance was controversial for the exposure of one of her nipples.), I think you mean “The second appearance” as the exposure happened at Starfloor.
- Done Yeah, you were right ;) Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:48, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- For this part (where she arrived by helicopter "like a diva”.), I do not believe that the quote is needed so I would remove it. It comes across more like a fan than something for an encyclopedia.
- Final comments
- Good work on this. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Have a wonderful day or night. I will get to the review for the other song tomorrow if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 23:14, 18 December 2017 (UTC)
- @Aoba47: Thank you very much! I've answered to all your comments! Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:48, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
- Verdict
- Thank you for addressing everything! I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 19:15, 19 December 2017 (UTC)
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