Talk:How About a Friendly Shrink?/GA1

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Theleftorium in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Theleftorium 12:57, 1 April 2010 (UTC)Reply

Nice work on the article Hunter! Here's my suggestions:

  • "How About a Friendly Shrink?" received generally positive mixed reviews – Wouldn't "received mixed to positive reviews" sound better?
  • lowest rating for an individual Desperate Housewives in series history – "the series' history"? (appears in the Reception section too)
  • which he won't let Lynette read – "he will not let"
  • what she's sure is – "she is"
  • he can't reach – "he cannot"
  • Gabrielle initially suspects her daughter Juanita + Susan is pleased that her son M.J. – will avoid confusion to people not familiar with the show (like myself)
  • Angie takes an instant dislike to her son Danny's – same as above
  • who is in the Leopards, are among the slow group – shouldn't this say "is among"?
  • seems to understand what he's been through – "he has"
  • the person she's become – "she has"
  • Link Wisteria Lane
  • The episode marked the return of
  • when her character suffered a nervous breakdown – you can't say "when her character" because Katherine Mayfair is a character
  • Reeves is the third former –> Leeves
  • Link "rating" and "share" to Nielsen_ratings#Ratings/share_and_total_viewers
  • Link You Gotta Get a Gimmick
  • praised the episode, and said she was – no need for a comma here
  • Try to avoid repetition of the word "said" in the second and third paragraphs of the reception section
  • Can you move the quotation box to the left? The image above gets in the way.

Good luck! :) Theleftorium 12:57, 1 April 2010 (UTC)Reply