Talk:Howard R. Johnson

Latest comment: 15 years ago by Msgj in topic Neutrality

Neutrality

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This article needs to be rewritten in a neutral style. MSGJ 14:07, 29 October 2008 (UTC)Reply

My article is reliable, factual and neutral. It doesn't need to be rewritten because all of the points that I have made in this article can be found on reliable websites and in books. If you would like more information, you can find it in the book Geronimo! by William Breuer, and on the two sites that I have mentioned as my sources. Everything in the article is 100% true. Again, my article is well-sourced and is qualified to be on Wikipedia in its present state. Thank you for your input.
-The Contributor of the Article
It is not written in the formal style which is needed here. Sentences such as When the brave men of the 'Geronimo Regiment' parachuted ... are not neutral. Brave is a subjective opinion, not a verifiable fact. There are many examples of such sentences. Don't be defensive - it's a good article. But it could be a lot better :) MSGJ 12:47, 7 November 2008 (UTC)Reply
I rewrote some sentences that I thought might not be neutral. If anything else remains, if you want to let me know, I will change those sentences, too. Thank you very much for letting me know about this.
72.131.79.213 (talk) 15:03, 8 November 2008 (UTC)Reply
That's much better, nice one. MSGJ 17:18, 8 November 2008 (UTC)Reply