Talk:Howard the Duck (film)/GA1
Latest comment: 14 years ago by Wizardman in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman 03:18, 20 December 2009 (UTC) Here are a few early issues I noticed, to start things off:
- The lead should be expanded, since the main body text is pretty big.
- The poster image size should be reduced with fair use guidelines (other two have no issues)
I'll do the rest of the review tomorrow. Wizardman 03:18, 20 December 2009 (UTC)
Here's the rest:
- "Around this time, Jenning's body is taken over by a lifeform from another alternate dimension. Then, the group goes to a diner." The transition seems rather jarring. Granted, maybe it was in the film too, if so this can be ignored.
- "telepathically assassinating table condiments." uh... either that's a messup, or it needs explanation, since I'm kinda confused as to how one would kill off condiments.
- "One of the actors who auditioned, Ed Gale, was rejected because he was too tall for the role, but was later hired as a stunt double. Huyck initially attempted to film with a child actor. Gale portrayed the role during evening shoots." Sentences one and three may be better combined, or at least next to each other since it's the same actor. That paragraph feels like it unnecessarily bounces between the child/little actors and Gale, though maybe that was intentional.
- "Because Howard's voice was not cast until the film had become editing, synchronization was extremely difficult." Do you mean had begun editing, or a different word? become sounds wrong.
I'll put this GAN on hold, and give a week for it to be fixed. I'll pass upon everything being handled. While you're doing that perhaps I'll watch this movie to see how bad it is :) Wizardman 05:40, 22 December 2009 (UTC)
- Rewrote the plot section to clarify the jarring skip from one part of the plot to another. I didn't even notice the "condiment assassination" bit when I worked on the article. That is funny. Clarified the problems with the production section. (Ibaranoff24 (talk) 04:07, 24 December 2009 (UTC))
- Looks good, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman 05:08, 24 December 2009 (UTC)