Talk:Hurricane! (American Dad!)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 01:20, 1 November 2011 (UTC)

Will review soon. Ruby 2010/2013 01:20, 1 November 2011 (UTC)

Please use:  Done/✗ Not done

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• There's one dab link

 Done

• "...in response to a oncoming hurricane." -> an

 Done

• Indicate Seth MacFarlane was the co-creator of all three shows in lead

 Done

• "The episode was well-received by television critics, who praised the humor and cultural references. " -> its

 Done

• "This episode was written by..." -> "Hurricane!"

 Done

• featured... featured (use of same word in lead; switch it up)

 Done

• For the production section, you jump into the "crossover event" pretty abruptly. I know the lead already talks about it, but you need to write the body as if the lead isn't there (hope that makes sense)

 Done

• Tense issue: ...event if this one receives successful ratings." -> received

 Done

• Who is Mike Barker? A writer? Producer? For which series?

 Done

• Make sure sentences with direct quotes end with a citation directly after sentence (Barker quote, look for others)

 Done

• "In April 2011, the executives of the Fox Broadcasting Company..." Removed bolded

 Done

• "MacFarlane later agreed with the decisions after being consulted with the executives of Fox, and a spokeswoman for the company later announced that the episode would air the succeeding season.[7]" Don't you mean MacFarlane consulted with the executives (rather than them consulting him)?

I'm not sure who came up to who first.

• I think you should change casting to Writing and casting (b/c you mention the writers)

 Done I just organized the section into one.

• "...first time Henry made a guest appearance on the show since" the show -> American Dad

 Done

• Why do you have two different quote box colors?

 Done Removed other quote box.

• Use consistent date formatting for refs

 Done

• "...according to the Nielson ratings.[17]" Removed bolded

 Done

• It could use another review or two for the reception section
• "...Dyana Maria deemed the episode as "classic", expressing..." as -> a

 Done

• Were there any cultural references you could add? (reliably cited of course)

I'll place the review on hold for a week while the above comments get addressed. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 02:59, 1 November 2011 (UTC)

The cultural references will not be reliable sourced, unfortunately. As for the reviews, those three were the only ones available. I can reformat it to make it look larger. - DAP388 (talk) 00:59, 3 November 2011 (UTC)

Should be good now. :) - DAP388 (talk) 22:06, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

Looks good. Happy to pass this one for GA. Ruby 2010/2013 23:00, 4 November 2011 (UTC)