Talk:Hurricane Gordon (2000)/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by TheAustinMan in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 18:05, 2 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

Hello George! I will be reviewing this article. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 18:05, 2 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • Make sure your uses of "Yucatan" in the lead have an accented a → "Yucatán"
  • Link frontal boundary to weather front.
  • "Gordon brought moderately storm surge..." → "Gordon brought moderate storm surge..."
  • "Overall, Gordon caused $10.8 million (2000 USD)[nb 1]..." → "Overall, Gordon caused $10.8 million (2000 USD)[nb 1] in damages..."

Meteorological history

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  • In the picture of TD 11's wind radii, should it be "wind radius" in the caption or "wind field," since there are multiple contoured areas.
  • "The developing system moved slowly northwestward across the northern Yucatán Peninsula. Later that day, the depression moved inland over the Yucatán Peninsula." So... the depression crossed the peninsula twice?
  • "...though a few computer models forecast for the depression..." forecast → forecasted
  • "...forecast track was sifted further east..." I think you mean shifted.
  • Link extratropical cyclone.
  • There's a neat radar image in the MH, but which one is Gordon? The mass of rain over Florida or the organized cluster of storms over South Carolina? If it was the one over SC, then the caption could say 'Extratropical remnants of Gordon...' If it was the one over Florida, perhaps you could try cropping the image?

Preparations

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  • "The Florida Division of Emergency Management in Tallahassee made a mandatory evacuation in Hernando County," I think instead of 'made' you should say 'issued an order for a...' since you don't 'make' evacuations.
  • "...while voluntary evacuations are called for..." → "...while voluntary evacuations were called for..."
  • "The Chevron Corporation..." I think you don't need 'the' or 'corporation' in this case, since you mentioned it earlier.
  • "Carnival's Sensation..." → "Carnival Sensation..."

Impact

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  • "... and twenty-four nearby homes." What's with the sudden use of word form?
  • "...with spotter reports and radar estimates indicating over 8 inches (200 mm) in Georgetown." I know you mention heavy rainfall earlier in the sentence, but I think it would be useful to indicate '8 inches (200 mm) of rain.'
  • "...while according newspaper accounts," You're missing the word 'to.'
  • "...standing water in excess of 2–3 feet (0.61–0.91 m) in many areas." You say excess, but then you provide a range with a maximum limit. Was it in excess of that range, or did standing water only fall in that range?
  • Is there anything from Virginia other than rain totals and a few high water and overflow reports?
  • "In Delaware, precipitation totals at Newark and New Castle Airport reached 1.82 inches (46 mm), respectively." You provide one value and say respectively. Alternatively, you could say "...totals at Newark and New Castle Airport both reached..."
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  • Every external link with the exception of "NHC (NOAA) Gordon," "Sky Chaser.com," "Hurricane Gordon Report," and "Hurricane Gordon" is a dead link. You could fix that.

Disambiguations

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Dablinks found the following disambiguations on the article:

That should be it for now. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 18:05, 2 January 2013 (UTC)Reply