Talk:Hurricane Greta (1956)/GA1

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• Hurricane Greta was the largest Atlantic hurricane ever recorded, with a gale-diameter of roughly 1,200 miles (1,930 km). - "Gale-diameter" seems a bit jargon-ish.

• Reworded Cyclonebiskit (talk) 04:34, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• By November 2, the system began producing gale-force winds; however, winds near the center of circulation were calm. - Where were the winds then?

• I think I fixed it Cyclonebiskit (talk) 04:34, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• I count 12 occurrences of "the system"; some reworded is needed to avoid repetition.

• Changed some Cyclonebiskit (talk) 04:34, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• Around this time, the system was classified as a modern-day tropical depression. - Rather confusing...

• Removed modern-day and added note that the SSHS wasn't in use until 1971 later on in the article Cyclonebiskit (talk) 04:34, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• Later that day, the first scientific mission into a hurricane with two planes took place. - It was the first scientific mission into Greta? Or the first scientific mission with two planes into Greta? Or the first scientific mission with two planes for any hurricane? The ambiguity needs to be clarified.

• Clarified Cyclonebiskit (talk) 04:34, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• On November 3, the depression was upgraded to Tropical Storm Greta while tracking southeastward as the circulation featured tropical characteristics. - Seems like you're trying to fit too many ideas into this sentence, and it doesn't flow well.

• Split into two sentences Cyclonebiskit (talk) 04:34, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• During the day on November 5 - "During the day"

• Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 04:34, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• After attaining its peak intensity, the storm began to move over cooler waters, leading to the elongation of the circulation. - What elongation?

• I'm confused what you mean Cyclonebiskit (talk) 04:34, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• You don't mention elongation before this sentence. –Juliancolton | ^Talk 19:25, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• Although Greta did not directly track over land as a tropical storm or hurricane, the large size of the system contributed to enormous waves, exceeding 20 ft (6.1 m) in height over a large expanse of the Atlantic. As far as I can tell the source doesn't use the (rather strong) word "enormous". Moreover, 20 ft doesn't seem unusually high.

• Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 04:34, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• Along the coast of Jacksonville, Florida alone, beaches sustained roughly $1.2 million (1956 USD; $9.6 million 2009 USD) in damages. - How does sand sustain damage?

• Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 04:34, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

On-hold for now. –Juliancolton | ^Talk 18:55, 27 August 2009 (UTC)