Talk:Hurricane Hilary (1993)/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: The Bushranger (talk · contribs) 01:29, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

The following issues in the text need to be addressed before this can be passed for GA:

Lede

• "Hurricane Hillary was a Category 3 hurricane..." Might want to clarify "East Pacific"/"Pacific Ocean" or something, as the reader could presume it was an Atlantic hurricane otherwise.
  • Meh, added. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
• "Nearly stalled as it underwent a Fujiwhara interaction..." Would suggest just "as it interacted with" and move the Fujiwhara comment and link to "Meteorological History", to tighten and simplify the lede a bit. The fact it intereacted is sufficent for the lede, I think; how it interacted can be explained in more detail later.
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
• The line about watches and warnings is slightly confusing. The threat ended? Then started again? Suggest similifying this a bit.
  • Yea, it ended, but started again, but explained that further via a wikilink to. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

Meteorological History

• Should wikilink convection and tropical wave.
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
• "the depression intensified into..." suggest "the depression intensified, becoming..."
  • Incorporated. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
• "atmospheric circulation..." does this mean Low-level Circulation Center? I'd assume the circulation would be fairly easy to find, but pinning down the center might be difficult.
  • Yea, change the wording. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
• "meteorolgists remarked the possibility of making landfall..." Bit of a grammar issue here. Perhaps "meterologists suggested there was a possibility the storm might make landfall..."
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
• "downgraded into a tropical storm..." suggeest "downgraded to a tropical storm..."
  • Ok. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
• "while most of the mid to upper level moisture..." suggest adding "associated with the storm" immediately after this.
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

Preparations and Impact

• "further advisories were issued..." What sort of advisories?
  • Watches and warnings.
• "Heavy rains, peaking at..." suggest "Heavy rains, with a maximum recorded amount of..."
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
• "Baja California Peninsula", shouldn't that be a lowercase P?
  • No, it is a proper known (a type of peninsula). YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

• Pictures are all appropriately licensed;
• References are from reliable sources and are inline appropriately, meets WP:V, WP:RS, WP:NOR;
• Appears to be free of copyvio/paraphasing/plagarism concerns
• Covers the topic well without going off on tangents;
• Is neutral and stable;
• MOS adhered to.

I'm putting this  On hold until the grammar/text issues above are resolved. - The Bushranger _{One ping only} 01:29, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

Nice work. I'm calling this a ✓ Pass. - The Bushranger _{One ping only} 00:46, 30 December 2011 (UTC)