Talk:Hyspaosines/GA1
Latest comment: 4 years ago by Amitchell125 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 10:44, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
Hi, I'll review this one.
Assessment
editLead section / infobox
editUnlink Iran.I’m unclear why the first sentence has a citation—is that he was an Iranian prince controversial at all?
- Mostly by new accounts and IPs. --HistoryofIran (talk) 18:48, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
- I would take out the citation here. Amitchell125 (talk) 21:02, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
- Done, moved them to the background section. --HistoryofIran (talk) 23:48, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
- I would take out the citation here. Amitchell125 (talk) 21:02, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
- Mostly by new accounts and IPs. --HistoryofIran (talk) 18:48, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
Governorship
edit...abrupt death… - can you be more specific about how he died?
Reign
editNo capitals in ‘’Astronomical Diaries’’....abrupt death… - can you be more specific about how he died?Who was Lucian?
- Added that he was a 2th-century Roman historian. --HistoryofIran (talk) 18:48, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
The son is not named, it was most likely Apodakos. - Ref 6b (Shayegan) appears to be more definite about his son’s name than this.
- Not sure I understand, thoughts? --HistoryofIran (talk) 23:34, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
- It's now looking OK. Amitchell125 (talk) 06:10, 7 October 2020 (UTC)
- Not sure I understand, thoughts? --HistoryofIran (talk) 23:34, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
Bibliography
editAdd source for Binar (1983).Add source for Garthwaite (2005), presumably this book.Add source for Brosius (2006), presumably this book.Link C.E. Bosworth (Clifford Edmund Bosworth); Wilhelm Eilers.url available for Shayegan here.url available for Binar here.url available for Schuol here.Bosworth, Hansmann (1998) and Schippmann are not currently used for citations, and need to be moved out of the 'Bibliography' section. I would put them in a 'Further reading section' if you want to keep them in the article, otherwise they should be deleted.Amitchell125 (talk) 21:11, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
On hold
editI have put the article on hold for a week until 14 October. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 18:37, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
Passing
editGreat work, now passing. Amitchell125 (talk) 06:12, 7 October 2020 (UTC)