Talk:I'm Your Captain (Closer to Home)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zeagler (talk) 18:45, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   • "Ten minutes in duration, it is the band's longest studio recording. One of the group's best-known songs, it is composed as two distinct but closely related movements." These consecutive sentences should be rewritten in a more encyclopedic tone.
   • "Accordingly, its title has been rendered in various ways..." The use of 'accordingly' makes it sound as if songs with more than one movement must suffer from inconsistent renderings of their titles.
   • "Several interpretations of the song have been given, with most revolving..." With + verb-ing is an awkward link. How about a semicolon followed by "most revolve around..."?
   • "It has since gone on to become a classic rock staple..."
   • Everything written in the lead must be covered in the body.
   • "It served either as ... or by soldiers who were returning from the war." Huh?
   • "'Wretched was the word to describe Grand Funk's music. Although the group occasionally achieve an interesting song—'I'm Your Captain' was about the best of the early ones ...'[18]" Awkward quoting here; try just extracting phrases and sticking them in your own sentences.
   • Check the rest of the prose for further instances of the above problems. Also, I suggest reading WP:1A.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   • You sell your source short by stating that compound binary form "was used for several well-known songs in the late 1960s and early 1970s". The source goes beyond the examples it provides and says that particular form was "heard mainly" in those decades. That's more relevant to this article than merely saying that other examples of the form exist.
   • "...which aspiring young guitarists of the time learned to imitate". Do you really think your source for this is to be taken literally?
   • "And with its melodic strengths and dramatic feel it is often considered one of the best rock songs of all time." You can't support "often..." with just one example. Furthermore, your source doesn't say the song's 'melodic strengths' and 'dramatic feel' have anything to do with his considering it great.
   • "The song has been a staple of Farner concert performances in the decades since its recording..." Unsupported.
   • "(or to some ears, D to Cadd9)" Unsupported.
   • Much of the 'Writing and recording' section is original research.
   • "It is considered to be the standout track on the Closer to Home album..." You can't support this with just one example.
   • "It was far more successful on progressive rock radio stations, such as those in New York, where its length and epic feel[9][10] were an asset and where it became a mainstay that appealed to a broad spectrum of rock fans outside Grand Funk's immediate listener base." Nothing is supported in this sentence except that the song has 'length' and an 'epic feel'. The sources say nothing about how the song's progressive rock radio airplay compared to that on any other format, nothing about New York, nothing about its attributes being assets, and nothing about its appeal outside GFR's immediate listener base.
   • "Its airplay helped the album reach the Top 10 of the U.S. albums chart within a month of its release." Does the Behind the Music episode really attribute the album's chart placing to the song's airplay? Similarly, does the episode really attribute the song's supposed following among American soldiers in Vietnam to the band's having a similar background as the soldiers? One has to question the credibility of VH1 here...
   • Songmeanings.net is not reliable.
   • "Comparisons have been made to Walt Whitman's poem "O Captain! My Captain!" in its use of the rank to mean Abraham Lincoln." Just one source, so how about "A comparison has been made..."?

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   • The 'Later appearances' section seems like miscellaneous information thrown together.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   • "Released as a single, it was modestly successful in early fall 1970, reaching number 22 on the U.S. pop singles chart as the group's first hit single." 'Modestly successful' and 'hit' are POV. You've already given the chart position, so let the reader decide for himself whether that constitutes a 'modestly successful' or 'hit' single.
   • "It was far more successful on progressive rock radio stations..." What does 'far more successful' mean?

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail: