Talk:I Am... Yours/GA1

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 14:35, 24 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

Review

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Set list
  • There's a mistake in "That's Why You Are Beautiful". Here it says that it contains excerpts of "The Beautiful Ones" by Prince. That's wrong. I've listened to the song over and over and I can't find not even a single fragment (lyrics or music) from that song. The performance is almost a carbon copy of the studio version, it only skips four lines. Other than that, it is exactly like the studio version. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 190.178.141.218 (talk) 21:41, 30 August 2012 (UTC)Reply
Lead
  • Ok.
Background and development
  • "performed with her band, Suga Mama,"
  • The lead says "The Mamas". Which one is the correct name?
  • Suga Mama is the correct one.
Show synopsis
  • I made some minor fixes.
Reception
  • Separated paragraphs to ease reading.
Broadcasts
  • Linked I Am... Tour, since its only wikilinked on the lead and beginning of background, which is too far.
  • No. That's WP:OVERLINK. Another article should be wiki-linked just in the lead and in the body of the article.
  • "Several videos of the live performances of "Halo", "Single Ladies (Put a Ring on It)" and "Scared of Lonely" were released at MTV Latin America."
  • When?   Done
  • "The live performance of "Halo" (2009)"
  • Date is needless.   Done
  • "at 9:00 PM/EST as a Thanksgiving special."
  • Date is really relevant? Why don't just say:
  • "On November 26, 2009, ABC Network aired a one-hour television special called Beyoncé – I Am... Yours at 9:00 PM/EST as a Thanksgiving special." "ABC Network aired a one-hour television special called Beyoncé – I Am... Yours on November 26, 2009, as a Thanksgiving special"?   Done
Set list
  • Ok.
Reference check
  • From background
    • The statement ending: "with her band, Suga Mama, and a small team of dancers." is covered by reference #2 from IMBD? I found nothing on the ref to support the entire sequence on a first check.
  • Replaced.
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