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Ok, where to start? Only one source need be cited per paragraph unless controversial or multiple sources are used; I cleaned out a bunch of these redundant cites, but you need to finish the job.

  • Still got lots of these redundant cites, especially early in the article.
  • Combine these and give a cite: In 1971, under Nixon's détente policy, the 7th Infantry Division was withdrawn, leaving the 2nd Infantry Division as the only US Army unit in Korea. I Corps remained in Korea as a two-division formation until until 1971 when I Corps Headquarters was reduced to zero strength. With growing confidence among Korean senior staff and American insistence on burden-sharing, a new command was formed to defend the western half of DMZ. By 1982, the Third Republic of Korea Army (TROKA) assumed command of the Republic of Korea Corps formerly under US First Corps Group.
  • Command element is very unfamiliar terminology to this Army vet, try using headquarters or subordinate command or something similar as I've done already for you in a few places.
  • Fix your bunched links. This is going to be a continual problem for you as you stack things up on the right side, you might as well start fixing them across all your articles.
  • Do a copyedit, there are still a number of typos present.
    • Copy-edit done. Are there any particular areas that still need it? —Ed!(talk) 20:19, 11 August 2009 (UTC)Reply
      • There are still some, but I didn't note exactly where they were. Double-check everything that is underlined in red is a good start.
        • Checked. Red links are all topics which currently have no articles. —Ed!(talk) 16:10, 15 August 2009 (UTC)Reply
          • I wasn't talking about red links, but rather the red underlines that show up when I'm editing if Firefox on my Mac thinks I've misspelled a world. Maybe nothing like this shows up on your computer, but it's kind of handy (although really easy to overlook). I've corrected this typo, but this is what I'm talking about: For the next nine months, the corps supervised training and large scale maneuvers for Amry divisions activating into the force.
  • The article "the" isn't necessary when referring to the corps with its number. The I Corps sounds odd, while I Corps reflects current usage.
    • I only did that when beginning a sentence. American style states that sentences can't begin with a number, and the "I," which stands for 1, falls under this constraint. —Ed!(talk) 17:23, 10 August 2009 (UTC)Reply
      • That's one rule I've never heard of, but I'd bet that outside the military with all its numbered units, it's not one that comes up often. At any rate watch for capitalization of Corps without the I; without it it's not a proper noun and shouldn't be capitalized. I've cleaned-up those in the lead. I realize that your eyes have seen this so article so often that they're starting to glaze over, but this is the sort of stuff that will bite you in the ass if you want to submit this for A-class, which I rather expect you do.
  • Be sure to link all the locations listed. Miyazaki isn't.
    • The dates I didn't link didn't have articles on wikipedia, and they weren't in any other existing article, so I assume they are not notable enough to merit their own pages. —Ed!(talk) 17:17, 10 August 2009 (UTC)Reply
      • You know what they say about assumptions... What dates? I was talking about places like Miyazaki.
  • Consolidate some of your paragraphs, those in the Korea section are often very short.
  • Be careful of Army press releases; they tend to use a lot of passive voice and often spin things to seem like they're doing stuff specially when it's really just normal business with a bit more focus than normal. Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:01, 7 August 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • Is this a quote from Marston: The next few years were a period during which the terms of the surrender were supervised and enforced; Japanese military installations and material were seized, troops were disarmed and discharged, and weapons of warfare disposed of. The duties of the occupation force included conversion of industry, repatriation of foreign nationals, and supervision of the complex features of all phases of Japanese government, economics, education, and industry. If so put it in quotes.
  • Define CPV. It is Chinese People's Volunteers, Communist People's Volunteers, what?
  • 25th ID no longer has any troops at Ft. Lewis and 2nd ID has many 3 brigades there, but the division's HQ is in Korea. You might want to clarify that in the Organization section.
  • What day did WWI end, 10 November or 11 November?
  • Consolidate these two sentences: The Japanese attack stalled, allowing I Corps to mount an offensive. Once the threat of a Japanese invasion of Australia was abated, I Corps launched and offensive to push back the Japanese.
  • And just how do you spell Eichelberger? Check for consistency.
  • You sometimes forget to give a link to the campaign or battle that the corps was fighting in. St. Mihiel, Luzon both need such links as does the fighting in Korea after Operation Ripper.
  • You might mention that 9th ID was Ft. Lewis's major tenant unit when the corps reactivated and how that division downsized before the post was selected for expansion in the early 90s. Your source is a little disingenuous about that whole sequence of events. Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:23, 18 August 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • Disambiguate these links: Outposts at Bunker Hill, The Hook, Kelly, Old Baldy Hill, Nori, and Pork Chop Hill were defended in heavy fighting within I Corps' area of responsibility. Some of these have nothing to do with the Korean War. Otherwise everything looks good. Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:52, 18 August 2009 (UTC)Reply
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