Talk:I Love You (2NE1 song)/GA1
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:18, 1 January 2021 (UTC)
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My second time reviewing an article for you; happy New Year! --K. Peake 12:18, 1 January 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
edit- Remove venue parameter because that is for live recordings only
- Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
- A number of the genres listed are not sourced anywhere in the body
- "South Korean girl group 2NE1." → "South Korean girl group 2NE1 from the Japanese edition of their third and final studio album, Crush (2014)." for proper context and the edition part makes it clear it is the Japanese version included on the release
- Not done Not sure about this since the song was mainly promoted as a standalone single during the duration of its run and wasn't included in the album until many comebacks later
- "The original Korean version was released" → "The Korean version was released"
- "digital download and streaming on July 5, 2012 by" → "digital download and streaming as a single on July 5, 2012, through" with the targets and changing to "through" to avoid repetitive wording
- "of the track" → "of the song"
- "The track was written," → "The song was written," but there is a rule that anything written in the lead needs to also be written in the body, so the composition and arrangement parts need to be written in prose there despite already being sourced from personnel
- I just replaced it instead with info on its production, since its the same person for both versions and a lot of people contributed to the songwriting.
- "with additional composition by" → "with additional composition from"
- "Musically, "I Love You" incorporates elements of" → ""I Love You" incorporates elements of" since "musically" is a term that is appropriate for usage in the body, not lead; however, dance-pop is not sourced anywhere in the body
- "generally positive reviews from critics," → "generally positive reviews from music critics,"
- "The single ranked as the best" → "The song was ranked as the best"
- Popjustice should not be italicised and remove the Billboard ranking since there's only two cited in the article, so they shouldn't both be mentioned in the lead
- Not done I included both of the Billboard rankings in the lead and left out Popjustice as Billboard is more well-known and reliable
- Nkon21 This is fine; my point was that two year-end lists was too much for the lead but it's fine with one and a decade-end list. --K. Peake 08:21, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
- "and became the group's sixth number-one single. It went on" → "and becoming the group's sixth number one single. "I Love You" went on"
- "by the end of year, making it one of the best-selling singles in the country in 2012." → "by the end of 2012, making it one of the best-selling singles of 2012 in South Korea."
- Target Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
- "marking the group's first" → "marking 2NE1's first"
- "the song peaked at number 5" → "the song peaked at number five" per MOS:NUM
- Mention the music video after the commercial performance here, before ending this para with a mention of a live performance (maybe during the tour if that is the most notable... you are the expert on this article's subject so you will be better to decide?)
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:25, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Background and release
edit- "that 2NE1 will make a comeback" → "that 2NE1 would make a comeback"
- "new single titled "I Love You"" → "new single entitled "I Love You"" with the target
- Target Korean-language to Korean language
- None of the sentences in the section's opening para apart from the above one and the music video one are backed up by the sources; make sure to fix this
- I removed the sentence about Dara since I couldn't find any reliable sources to back it up
- "member Dara posted" → "group member Dara posted"
- "what they have done" → "what they had done"
- "suggested that it will be a genre at all ages" → "suggested for it to be a genre all ages"
- "simultaneously with its..." replace this with "as a single." to finish the sentence, plus remove all of the music video info from here and move the streaming charts info to the music video section
- "premiered digitally on August 29" → "premiered digitally on August 29, 2012"
- "as the group's third official Japanese single" → "as the group's third Japanese single" with the target
- "on September 19 through" → "on September 19, through"
- Target CD to Compact disc
- Wikilink DVD
- "The Japanese version of the song was later included in the Japanese edition of the group's second studio album titled" → ""I Love You" was later included on the Japanese edition of 2NE1's second studio album" because this para is entirely about the Japanese version and the edition part makes it especially obvious, though writing "Japanese version" again is overkill
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:25, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Composition
edit- Retitle to Composition and lyrics
- Add more info for the text of the audio sample
- The first two sentences should be in the opening section instead
- "who had worked on many of" → "who had worked on much of"
- "and has a runtime of 3:57." → "and has a length of 3:57."
- "Musically, the song combines" → "Musically, "I Love You" combines" and this should be the first sentence of the section instead
- "Eurodance and traditional" → "Eurodance, and traditional"
- "contrasting the styles" → "contrasting with the styles"
- Are you sure there's no info about the chorus to add?
- None that I can find in reliable sources at the moment.
- Wikilink press release
- Target hip-hop to Hip hop music
- Target R&B to Contemporary R&B
- "trot instrumentals in the song" → "trot instrumentation in the song"
- "throughout the 20th century." → "throughout the 2000s."
- 20th century is 1900-2000
- Nkon21 Sorry, got mixed up here briefly; change to "the 1900s". --K. Peake 08:21, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
- "has been described as an confession song," → "is a confession song,"
- "with the members' singing:" → "the members sing:"
- "faith like this"." → "faith like this."" since that is a full quote
- Target rock to Rock music
- Target acoustic to Acoustic music
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:58, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Reception
edit- Rather than having the domestic and international reception sub-sections, set the critical reception as the first para and follow it with the commercial reception paras, though the reception in South Korea will be the first commercial para in this order
- "South Korean daily charts including Melon and Mnet and" → "South Korean daily charts, including Melon and Mnet, and"
- "debuted at number 2" → "debuted at number two"
- "dropped to number 3 on the chart," → "descended to number 3,"
- "the best-selling song of the month." → "the best-selling song of July 2012."
- "and ranked number six" → "and ranked at number six"
- Wikilink Kesha and David Guetta on the img text
- "received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
- Remove "internationally" term because there are not separate reviews from South Korean sources
- Remove "the American music magazine" and any other introductions to publications
- Target pop to Pop music
- "and compared the production similar to that" → "and compared the production to that"
- The synths comparison can stay here, but why have you not mentioning the song as including synths anywhere in the comp section?
- "to that of" → "to those of"
- Popjustice should not be italicised
- "ranked the song" → "ranked the song as"
- "cavalcade of amazingness."" → "cavalcade of amazingness"."
- "as one of their finest works and" → "as one of 2NE1's finest works, and"
- "Commercially, "I Love You" peaked at" → ""I Love You" peaked at"
- Copies sold in the US is unsourced
- Wikilink airplay
- "the song peaked at number 5" → "the song peaked at number five"
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:58, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Accolades
edit- There is no need for tables when only one or two accolades exist; the Popjustice and Billboard decade-end list are written out in prose in the reception section, so the other Billboard ranking should be as well. Also, retitle this to Awards because only they will be left and make it a sub-section.
- I didn't make it a sub-section as the table's header is sufficient enough in my opinion
- Nkon21 I would understand that comment if this was about making a section out of the awards, but it's only a sub-section; they obviously have no place in commercial reception like you have done. --K. Peake 08:21, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
- Centre the table's refs
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:58, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Music video and promotion
edit- "for the music video" → "for the song's music video" with the wikilink
- "on July 1, which composed" → "on July 1, 2012, which composed of"
- "on July 2 and 3 respectively." → "on July 2 and 3, respectively."
- "On July 4, a 25-second" → "On July 4, 2012, a 25-second"
- "and showcased the song's" → "as well as showcasing the song's"
- "The official music video was then released" → "The music video was then released"
- "within 17 hours after release." → "within 17 hours of being released."
- "on July 10 and was recorded by" → "on July 10, 2012, which was recorded by"
- Target SBS to Seoul Broadcasting System
- Wikilink Inkigayo
- "The group was supposed to perform the song on" → "The group were supposed to perform the song for"
- "on July 12 but it was later" → "on July 12, 2012, but the performance was later"
- "the group kicked off their first worldwide concert tour titled" → "2NE1 kicked off their first worldwide concert tour entitled"
- "and was considered to be" → "which was considered to be"
- "The tour saw" → "The tour span"
- "previous works since debut." → "previous works since their debut."
- "on September 19," → "on September 19, 2012,"
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 03:04, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Track listing
edit- Target Digital download to Music download
- Remove wikilink on Philippines
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 03:04, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Credits and personnel
edit- Target Melon to Melon (online music service)
- Use
{{spaced ndash}}
so there is the right space between credits and personnel
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 03:04, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Charts
editKorean version
edit- Year is missing in brackets for the weekly charts table
- Make the first table sortable
- Year-end chart performance for "I Love You" → 2012 year-end chart performance for "I Love You"
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 03:04, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Japanese version
edit- Good
Release history
edit- Format → Format(s)
- Worldwide → Various
- Refs should be centered
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 03:04, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
References
edit- Copyvio score looks very good at 18.7%
- Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
- Apple Music → Apple Music (JP) on ref 4
- Language parameter is missing for ref 6
- Cite Nate as publisher instead for refs 8, 14, 15, 33 and 38
- Cite The Chosun Ilbo as work/website instead for ref 10
- Target Gaon Chart to Gaon Music Chart on ref 16
- Cite lastname followed by first and middle name in firstname parameter for ref 19, plus cite Spin as work/website with the target
- Retitle ref 20 to the actual title and cite Rolling Stone Japan as work/website with the target
- Cite Popjustice as publisher instead for ref 21
- Ref 29 archive is blacklisted by my laptop's security; are you sure you shouldn't add a different one instead? Plus, only cite a work/website or publisher, not both.
- Removed
- Ref 32 should have a title that shows it has various citations, like "Citations regarding the teasers for the music video:"
- www.chosun.com → The Chosun Ilbo on ref 36
- Cite Billboard as work/website instead for ref 42
- Cite Oricon as publisher instead for ref 45, removing the other publisher
- iTunes Store (US). Apple Inc → Apple Music (US) on ref 46
- iTunes Store (JP). Apple Inc → Apple Music (JP) on ref 47
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 03:04, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
External links
edit- Useless section because this video is in the infobox
Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 03:04, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Final comments and verdict
edit- On hold after reviewing over the course of the day; happy new year and good luck with the fixes! --K. Peake 21:44, 1 January 2021 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: Ok I think that addresses everything, please let me know if there is something that I missed. ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 02:30, 4 January 2021 (UTC)
- @Nkon21: There were only a few things left to fix, but I did them anyway since they were minor and a number were ones for which new text had been added since I started the review. ✓ Pass now, another great job on this article like last time! --K. Peake 07:35, 4 January 2021 (UTC)