Talk:I Miss You (Miley Cyrus song)/GA2
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GA Review
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Reviewer: Gongshow Talk 01:51, 28 May 2010 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it reasonably well written?
- A. Prose quality:
In the lead: "...was written by Cyrus", and later in the "Background" section, and again in the audio caption, Cyrus is credited as the sole writer. These instances should be perhaps be changed to "co-written", as the song's infobox indicates there are two other writers.
- A. Prose quality:
In the "Background" section: "Cyrus later recorded the song for her debut album, Meet Miley Cyrus." - The source provided shows information on the "Artist Karaoke Series: Miley Cyrus" album. Maybe this album is what the prose was meant to reference?In the "Critical reception" section: "Heather Phares of Allmusic stated that since Cyrus did not make a memorable impression in the first Hannah Montana soundtrack as herself, the voice change Cyrus used to differentiate herself from her television character worked well" - This sentence is really an overall comment on the album as a whole, not "I Miss You". I would remove this.
- B. MoS compliance:
- B. MoS compliance:
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
In the "Background" section, it states the song "incorporates pop rock and soft rock elements" - The source provided does not indicate this; it states only that "the arrangements are more organic and rock-oriented". Further, this description was not assigned to "I Miss You" specifically, but to "several songs" on the album.
- A. References to sources:
- "...which inspired Cyrus to write 'I Miss You'". - While I believe this to be a truthful statement, the source provided does not credit Cyrus as a songwriter. I would substitute another source that more clearly expresses that her grandfather's death inspired Miley to write the song.
- In the "Live performances" section: I see that this page indicates Cyrus performed the song on Oprah, but what about the "sky-like" background, and why is that in quotes?
- In the "Critical reception" section: "Joseph P. Kahn of the Boston Globe mentioned that the song "surpass[es] much of what's heard on Radio Disney" - Kahn only noted parenthetically that Cyrus writes songs, including "I Miss You". The comment about "surpassing much of what's heard on Radio Disney" refers to "her tunes". This should be removed from the article.
"Maitland McDonagh of TV Guide described the song as 'a vague rocker-chick grab' that showed how much she loved her grandfather." The "vaguely rocker-chick garb" refers to her clothing in-concert, so for commentary on "I Miss You", the reviewer only says that "she sings about...how much she loved her grandfather".
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
More details on the song's lyrical composition are needed, in my opinion. It's clear the song was dedicated to Cyrus' late grandfather, but I recommend adding more information on specific lyrics, as other Cyrus/Montana GA (and potential GA) articles have (e.g., "Breakout", "The Best of Both Worlds", "Supergirl", "Butterfly Fly Away", etc). I'm also concerned that the reviews in the "Critical reception" section amount to, at best, three one-liners. I recommend adding more commentary from critics - by quantity and/or quality.This has been brought to my attention several times but what can I do if there is no coverage of it? Nothing more exists. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 02:10, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- B. Focused:
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
While not required, it would be nice if the article contained an image, especially since the infobox contains no image (I assume because there was no physical single released). Any chance there's an image of Cyrus performing the song live, a la most of her other GA articles ("Fly on the Wall", "7 Things", "Start All Over", etc)?No image available. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 02:11, 28 May 2010 (UTC)That's okay, just wanted to make sure. Gongshow Talk 00:02, 29 May 2010 (UTC)
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
I have made some minor edits to the article, mostly for small cleanup and/or to tighten up sentences which came across to me as unfocused or excessively wordy. Let me know if you have any questions. Gongshow Talk 01:51, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- The issues have been resolved. While I would have liked to have seen more coverage for the song, the article is sufficiently broad (addressing the song's main points), and also meets the other GA criteria. Congrats! Gongshow Talk 05:17, 30 May 2010 (UTC)