Talk:I Won't Say (I'm in Love)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:37, 6 June 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• You can remove the following unnecessary infobox parameters:

• "Cover"
• "Alt"
• "Caption"

• Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:04, 15 June 2016 (UTC)

• Unlink "Alan Menken" from the "Producer" parameter since you already linked him above in the "Writer" parameter

• Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:05, 15 June 2016 (UTC)

Lead

Paragraph 1

• Since Cheryl Freeman is the only other credited musician as the artist(s) of the song, I would list her first after "while singers..."

• Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:08, 15 June 2016 (UTC)

Paragraph 2

• The correct wording is "Motown", not "Mowtown"

• Done. Can't believe I made that mistake hahahaha, how embarrassing.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

Paragraph 3

• Link "music critics" to the article "Music journalism" please

• Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

Background and context

Paragraph 1

• Remove the extra space after "literal" please

• Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

• That last sentence is way long; perhaps you could remove "featuring lyrics that Meg herself would never have sung," for the same effect?

• Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

Paragraph 2

• Again, since Cheryl Freeman is the only other credited musician as the artist(s) of the song, I would list her first after "Familiar with..."

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

• Add "musicians" after "Familiar with" please

• Done, but substituted "musicians" for "singers"; hope that's okay.

Paragraph 3

• American English: Change "realisation" --> "realization"

• Done.

Music and lyrics

Paragraph 2

• The link to "Parody" through "parodies" is unnecessary; please remove it

• Done, removed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

Reception

• Link "music critics" and "film critics" here in the lead sentence please to the aforementioned articles

• Done.

• Irving Tan's review is very, very long; please trim here and there

• Done; removed "which has gotten uncomfortably crass and increasingly unsubtle over the years" and "for that swooning female friend in your life..."

• Since the list listed also acts as the title, it would be correct to capitalize the statement as "The Best Ever Disney Songs"

• Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

Cover versions

• All good! Great work

• Thanks!

External links

• Alphabetize the categories please; the only ones out of place are "Disney's Hercules" and "Love themes"

• Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

End of GA Review:

Very well-written articles with minor issues. Seven days for changes to be made ("on hold"); good luck! Thanks! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 22:15, 14 June 2016 (UTC).

• I think I've covered just about everything! Awaiting your verdict :-)--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

• Great work. Thanks again! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 21:24, 16 June 2016 (UTC).