Talk:Icehouse (band)/GA1
Latest comment: 16 years ago by ThinkBlue in topic GA Review
GA Review
editGA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
This article is in decent shape, but it needs more work before it becomes a Good Article.
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- In the 1977-1981: Flowers section, this sentence ---> "Additional musicians used by Flowers in 1978 were Anthony Smith (aka Adam Hall) on keyboards and Don Brown on drums", I don't think that "aka (Adam Hall)" should be written, especially like that. In the 1990-current: Iva Davies and Icehouse section, this sentence ---> "On New Years Eve in 1999, Davies (vocals, guitar), Tognetti (violin), Guy Pratt (bass), Rom=Pari (Taiko - Japanese drums) and Sydney Symphony Orchestra performed The Ghost of Time on the northern forecourt of Sydney Opera House alongside Sydney Harbour and was televised around the world on CNN and other news networks", needs to be fixed, since there's a "=" in the sentence. Same section, this ---> "Davies had been working in 2001, on a proposed Icehouse album to be titled Bi-Polar Poems[39] with tracks available since 2004 from the Official Iva Davies - Icehouse website[40] including "Your God Not Mine" (see External link below)", is it necessary to include the EL into the paragraph of the article? Same section, this sentence ---> "2003 was a busy year for Iva Davies as he contributed "Ghost of Time" and other music to the film score of the Russell Crowe epic Master and Commander: The Far Side of the World", I don't think that the sentence should start with "2003", maybe if adding "In...." Same thing goes for the "2004" sentence.
- Tackled all of these rewording some sentences, deleting some parts; except for "Rom=Pari" the equals sign is part of the Japanese band/artist's name when rendered into English. See amazon.com search. Other searches often show the symbol left out and so use Rom Pari, I don't know the band/artist well enough to know which is definitely correct but have used the form most commonly used in the sources I listed in the Icehouse article, in this case the City of Sydney reference (currently ref #38). I don't know what "Rom=Pari" is in Japanese script nor do I know how to render it in Japanese.Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:35, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- I was just wondering if it was suppose to be like that, I'm not really that aware for this band or other related bands, you would have to excuse me on that. Check. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 02:59, 14 August 2008 (UTC)
- Tackled all of these rewording some sentences, deleting some parts; except for "Rom=Pari" the equals sign is part of the Japanese band/artist's name when rendered into English. See amazon.com search. Other searches often show the symbol left out and so use Rom Pari, I don't know the band/artist well enough to know which is definitely correct but have used the form most commonly used in the sources I listed in the Icehouse article, in this case the City of Sydney reference (currently ref #38). I don't know what "Rom=Pari" is in Japanese script nor do I know how to render it in Japanese.Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:35, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- In the 1977-1981: Flowers section, this sentence ---> "Additional musicians used by Flowers in 1978 were Anthony Smith (aka Adam Hall) on keyboards and Don Brown on drums", I don't think that "aka (Adam Hall)" should be written, especially like that. In the 1990-current: Iva Davies and Icehouse section, this sentence ---> "On New Years Eve in 1999, Davies (vocals, guitar), Tognetti (violin), Guy Pratt (bass), Rom=Pari (Taiko - Japanese drums) and Sydney Symphony Orchestra performed The Ghost of Time on the northern forecourt of Sydney Opera House alongside Sydney Harbour and was televised around the world on CNN and other news networks", needs to be fixed, since there's a "=" in the sentence. Same section, this ---> "Davies had been working in 2001, on a proposed Icehouse album to be titled Bi-Polar Poems[39] with tracks available since 2004 from the Official Iva Davies - Icehouse website[40] including "Your God Not Mine" (see External link below)", is it necessary to include the EL into the paragraph of the article? Same section, this sentence ---> "2003 was a busy year for Iva Davies as he contributed "Ghost of Time" and other music to the film score of the Russell Crowe epic Master and Commander: The Far Side of the World", I don't think that the sentence should start with "2003", maybe if adding "In...." Same thing goes for the "2004" sentence.
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- Year separators should use en-dash not hyphen, per WP:DASH.
- I think I've got all of these but I might've missed one or two.Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:35, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- Nope, you got 'em. Check. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 02:59, 14 August 2008 (UTC)
- I think I've got all of these but I might've missed one or two.Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:35, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- Year separators should use en-dash not hyphen, per WP:DASH.
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- In the 1977-1981: Flowers section, it would be best if "Iva Davis", "Icehouse (album)" were linked once, per here.
- Deleted re-appearance of Int Lnks in second paragaraph. I assume first "Iva Davies" linked in first sentence of this section is okay despite main leading to Iva Davies just above it?Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:35, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- Alright and check. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 02:59, 14 August 2008 (UTC)
- Deleted re-appearance of Int Lnks in second paragaraph. I assume first "Iva Davies" linked in first sentence of this section is okay despite main leading to Iva Davies just above it?Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:35, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- Same section, the link for "Don Walker" needs to be fixed.
- Fixed lnk to damb "Don Walker".Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:35, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
Same thing for the 1981-1989: Icehouse section, "Russell Mulcahy", "Hey Little Girl". Same thing for the 1990-current: Iva Davies and Icehouse section, "Great Southern Land".
- Removed other Int Lnks for these sections.Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:35, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- Double check. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 02:59, 14 August 2008 (UTC)
- Removed other Int Lnks for these sections.Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:35, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
- C. It contains no original research:
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- It would help if an image can be inserted to the article, so it can illustrate the significance of it. But, if an image can't be found, I won't fail the article because of that.
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- If the statements above can be answered, I will pass the article. Good luck with improving this article!
- Pass or Fail:
- Complied with most statements above. Except "Rom=Pari", I believe the equals sign should stay, it is part of the artist's name.Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:35, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- Found ROM=Pari at allmusic see link. Will change article from "Rom=Pari" to "ROM=Pari".Shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 05:08, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
-- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 18:50, 12 August 2008 (UTC)
- After reading the article, I have gone off and passed the article. Congratulations. If you feel that this review is in error, feel free to take it to a GA review. Thank you to Shaidar cuebiyar who worked hard to bring it to this status, and congratulations. ;) -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 02:59, 14 August 2008 (UTC)