Talk:Idea Store

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Aciurcina in topic Ashley Ciurcina Peer Review

Cierra Levy Peer Review

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This article is well organized and contains a good amount of information. However, I feel like more citations are needed as well as there should be more stating from exactly which source you obtained the information you just mentioned from. I would also suggest diversifying what types of sources you use because it seems like you used Ted Talk a lot but I didn't see an actual citation for it in the reference area. I like that you provided a picture which helps the reader to get more involved and see what you are talking about. I was wondering in your research, did you find any information on how the introduction of idea stores affected the people in a positive or negative way? And are there any prospects for new stores? I was also told by Ian that opening times are unnecessary for articles so you might want to consider getting rid of the opening times for each store. The overall language was upbeat and I don't get too much bias from the tone although it does sound like a wonderful idea.Cierrajadell (talk) 20:34, 7 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

Peer Review, Alex Duner

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This is a really cool topic! I'm pretty interested in the future of libraries but hadn't heard about this. Have you read about the New York Public Library's labs? They're doing some cool work you should check out.

From a clarity perspective I was a bit confused if there was just one Idea Store or lots of them; perhaps changing the opening sentence from The Idea Store of London to Idea Stores, which can be found in London... would make it clearer. I'm also not totally sure what Logline means so maybe you could come up with a clearer word to headline that section.

You do a great job linking to other pages on Wikipedia as well as to external pages; maybe you could format the reference links at the bottom with the preferred Wikipedia style. It's sometimes jarring when you see (Ted talk) as you are reading; it should either be a link or a reference. There are a couple other points throughout the article where you quote things but don't cite them—the article would be much better if you referenced where you got your information (yay linking!). Also, instead of relying on putting quote source and ADD CITATION/Intro Strategy Article, you should go ahead and just put in the citation (or, if the citation doesn't exist, take it out—this page is live on the Internet and it doesn't look as polished as it could be. Writing "to come" is weird.)

It's great that you have location information for all of the Idea Stores—it'd be cool if you could add geodata to the article for some of the locations. But other than that your article seems fairly thorough and well-researched.

asduner (talk) 20:42, 7 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

Min Woo Cho Peer Review

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Overall, I think the article is well organized and contains useful information. The detailed description of the Idea Store helped me understand why Idea Store was unique compared to other libraries. As I was reading the article, I noticed some words and names that could be linked to other Wikipedia articles, so I think that would add some detail to the article. Also, I think more pictures related to the Idea Store would make the article more approachable since too much word with a single picture of the Idea Store might make the page seem boring. So, pictures of the inside facilities, classes, and other Idea Stores would definitely make the article more interesting.

Regarding the citation method, I agree with Alex. The "(Ted Talk)" that appears throughout the article seems distracting. Also, I agree with Cierra that more citations would be helpful for your article.

Ashley Ciurcina Peer Review

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Cool topic, thorough yet concise writing!

I agree with previous mentions regarding more specific citations that lead to a reference list at the bottom rather than parenthetical citations within the document. More images of internal activity within Idea Stores would also be helpful as Min Woo Cho mentioned.

Lastly, if there were more specifics on examples of the types of classes and programs that have occurred, the idea of the Idea Store would be less vague as readers could understand it more practically in action. I would love to know what kinds of specific topics the programming addresses, what the audience attendance is like, etc.

Aciurcina (talk) 22:08, 14 November 2014 (UTC)Reply