Talk:If It's Lovin' that You Want/GA1

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Reviewer: Sauloviegas (talk · contribs) 20:52, 7 October 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing. Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 21:04, 7 October 2011 (UTC)

You're welcome... I'm going to start really soon. :) - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 22:12, 7 October 2011 (UTC)

First look through

Infobox

• digital download -> Digital download

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• Wasn't a CD single also released?

  I don't know. Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• Recorded: 2005; Bassmint Studios — The Loft Recording Studios (Bronxville, New York)

  Not really sure what you want me to do here lol. Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 18:01, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Lead

• '"If It's Lovin' that You Want" is a song recorded by Barbadian recording artist Rihanna, from her debut studio album Music of the Sun (2005).' -> '"If It's Lovin' that You Want" is a song recorded by Barbadian recording artist Rihanna, taken from her debut studio album Music of the Sun (2005).'

   Not done No, that is what is used in all Rihanna articles. Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• 'The song was made available to download via iTunes on December 2, 2005, released as the album's second and final single.' The song had been released for download before along with the album. I think it would be better like this: 'The song was released on December 2, 2005 through Def Jam Recordings, as the album's second and final single.'

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• 'Musically, the song draws influence from the musical genre of R&B; lyrically, the song is about "basically telling a guy, 'If it's lovin' that you want, you should make me your girl because I've got what you need".' -> 'Musically, the song draws influence from the musical genre of R&B; lyrically, it is about "basically telling a guy, 'If it's lovin' that you want, you should make me your girl because I've got what you need".'

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• '"If It's Lovin' that You Want" failed to match the commercial success of the singer's previous single, "Pon de Replay", managing to peak at number 26 on the US Billboard Hot 100 chart, but managed to peak at number 9 on the US Pop Songs chart. Elsewhere, the song managed to ascertain top forty chart positions, but was most successful in Australia, Ireland and New Zealand, where "If It's Lovin' that You Want" peaked inside the top ten.' -> '"If It's Lovin' that You Want" achieved moderate success around the world, reaching the top forty in few European countries, while reaching the top ten in Australia, Ireland and New Zealand. In the United States, the song failed to match the commcercial success of Rihanna's previous single, "Pon de Replay", peaking at number twenty-six on the Billboard Hot 100. It managed, however, to reach number nine on the Pop Songs chart.'

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• 'An accompanying music video was shot on a beach in California, and was directed by Marcus Raboy. The video features engaging in various activities on the beach, such as dancing and riding jet ski's with her friends.' -> 'An accompanying music video, directed by Marcus Raboy, was shot on a beach in California, and features the singer engaging in various activities on the beach, such as dancing and riding jet ski's with her friends.'

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 18:07, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Background and composition

• 'A 21 second sample' -> 'A 20 second sample'. It's only 20 when I play.

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 18:09, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Response

• Retitle to Reception, then change Critical reception to Critical response.

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• 'The song met with generally mixed reviews from music critics' -> 'The song was met with generally mixed reviews from music critics'

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• 'However, A. Vishnu of The Hindu had contrasting opinions with regard'. With regard?

  Yes, 'with regard to Rihanna's vocal performance', what's wrong with that? Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 18:11, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Music video

• 'During the interview, Rihanna elaborated further upon the content of the video and the meaning behind it, saying "This video is about having fun, giving off the vibe of the Caribbean," Rihanna said on the set of the clip.' Read this and re-write.

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• Try to replace 'Rihanna' with 'the singer' when appropriate.

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

Formats and track listings

• A CD single was also released. Add it (see here).

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 18:16, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Release history

• Remove 'Book:Loud (Rihanna album)'. It has nothing to do with the article.

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 18:17, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

References

• Publisher for MTV is 'MTV. MTV Networks'. MTV is owned by MTV Networks, while MTV Networks is owned by Viacom.

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• Why template:citenews for "Rihanna Album & Singles Chart History" and "If It's Lovin' That You Want - Rihanna"?

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 18:21, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Second look through

Infobox

• Digital download -> CD single, digital download

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• I don't think the Music video template is necessary here, since. You should place it under external links below references. See From the Bottom of My Broken Heart for an example.

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 20:33, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Lead

• Why did you removed the bold from "If It's Lovin' that You Want"? ("If It's Lovin' that You Want")

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• Music of the Sun (2005) -> Music of the Sun (2005)

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• 'Musically, -> Musically,

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• R&B -> R&B

   Done I had copied and pasted yours, and they didn't have wiki-links. Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• Billboard Hot 100 -> Billboard Hot 100

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• Wikilink Pop Songs

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon!

• Try to re-write the following sentence: was shot on a beach in California, and features the singer engaging in various activities on the beach, such as dancing and riding jet ski's with her friends. Beach is repeated twice.

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 20:38, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Reception

• number11 -> number 11

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 20:38, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Formats and track listings

• Missing CD single track listing.

  How do you want it written? Because that CD was released in the UK and Australia. Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 20:39, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

  You should titled AUS/UK CD single. Also, if they were only released in the UK and Australia, then you should specify this on the Release history. - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 22:13, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

   Done Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 22:44, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

  Ok, now it's just missing the correct track listing. Fix this and I'll take a last look on the article, then I'll pass it. :) - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 13:48, 9 October 2011 (UTC)

   Done I replaced this one with the AUS/German EP, as they are the same. Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 13:53, 9 October 2011 (UTC)

References

• Missing title for reference 38.

  There was a title, but I'd typed it wrong, it said title-, not title= Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 20:31, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• Good job! :) - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 16:57, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Thanks. I've done everything. Can you go through the article again please? Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 18:22, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

You're welcome! And yes I can. :) - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 19:02, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Done. Take a look. - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 19:30, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

I have one question on the track listing part. Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 20:41, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Okay, I've everything. Anyone else you can see? Calvin • ^NaNaNaC'mon! 22:44, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

I left a comment on the track listing part. - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 13:48, 9 October 2011 (UTC)

Congrats, the article has passed! :) - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 14:15, 9 October 2011 (UTC)