Talk:Illegals Program/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk) 02:43, 23 January 2011 (UTC)

I will review this article. -- Cirt (talk) 05:48, 16 December 2010 (UTC)

Almost a month and no review. I am willing to review it. TeacherA (talk) 23:49, 9 January 2011 (UTC)

OK, following this thread at User talk:Cirt i will review this article. I did offer TeacherA the chance to review, without response. Jezhotwells (talk) 02:43, 23 January 2011 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: One found and fixed.[1] Jezhotwells (talk) 02:47, 23 January 2011 (UTC)

Linkrot: Three found and tagged.[2] Jezhotwells (talk) 02:51, 23 January 2011 (UTC)

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   According to the media reports, planning by the FBI to have the 'illegals' arrested had begun in mid-June 2010, but the action was hastened reportedly by some members of the group intending to travel outside the U.S. as well as by Anna Chapman's growing concern about having been exposed At this point in the article, Chapman has not been mentioned so some clarification is needed.

   Vladimir Guriyev was planning to travel to France and possibly Russia, Bezrukov was planning to travel outside the U.S. with his son,[11] and Anna Chapman, in a telephone call to her father the day before the arrest, was suspicious that she may have been discovered to be an agent again a little explanation necessary, also the Chapman information is perhaps repetitious.

   There are a number of stray sentences which should be incorporated into paragraphs.

   Coinciding with the day of the prisoners' swap, the death of the prominent Russian defector Sergei Tretyakov who had died in the US on June 13, 2010, was reported on July 9, 2010; the Florida medical examiner's report released on September 20, 2010, cited an accident and a tumour as the cause of death Rather clumsy phrasing here.

   November 11, 2010, issue of Kommersant, Russia's broadsheet, Missing definite article.

   The India One reports that Is "India One" the title of a newspaper? If so it should be italicized.

   Her LinkedIn social networking site profile identified herself as CEO of PropertyFinder Ltd Clumsy phrasing.

   Chapman's prior meetings with her Russian handlers had been on Wednesdays, not face to face, solely to pass information via encrypted private computer networks at Barnes & Noble or at Starbucks. Needs explanation - if this was not face to face, it was not a meeting.

   Her suspicions increased when "Roman" was a different person than she knew Very clumsy phrasing

   OK, I am going to ask for a thorough copy edit before going through any more of the prose. as it stands, it clearly fails the "reasonably well written" criterion.

   The lead seems rather short and does not fully summarize the article as per WP:LEAD.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   Three dead links as per note above.

   The Russian artcile titles in references need to be translated. And for consistency all should state the language.

   All those checked and live appear reliable.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   Fine

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   Fine

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   OK

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   On Hold for seven days for above issues to be addressed. User:Jezhotwells |(talk) 03:16, 23 January 2011 (UTC)

   A couple of minor edits have been made but the issues raised above have not been addressed so I shall not be listing this article. Jezhotwells (talk) 16:11, 30 January 2011 (UTC)