Talk:Impeachment process against Richard Nixon/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Iazyges in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 22:58, 23 August 2022 (UTC)
Will take this on. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 22:58, 23 August 2022 (UTC)
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- No DAB links
- No dead links
- No missing citations : At the close of the first phase of the hearings, the committee, on June 24, issued four more subpoenas for additional White House tapes and materials related to a variety of issues of concern.
- I have added a citation for this statement. Drdpw (talk) 02:06, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
- Nixon resigned from office on August 9, 1974, before the House received the committee's recommendation for action.
- I have removed this sentence. I cannot verify whether the final report was submitted before or after August 9, when Nixon resigned. Also, the sentence really is not needed as the article later shows that Nixon resigned before the articles were acted upon. Drdpw (talk) 13:19, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
Discussion
editProse Suggestions
editPlease note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.
Lede
edit- Per MOS:LEDE, reduce the paragraphs to three or four paragraphs; this could fairly easily be done by merging the first and second, and third and fourth, IMO.
- Number of paragraphs reduced to four. Drdpw (talk) 18:25, 25 August 2022 (UTC)
Background
edit- Nixon thereupon ordered that Cox be fired, precipitating the immediate departures of Attorney General Richardson and Deputy Attorney General William Ruckelshaus in what became known as the "Saturday Night Massacre. I would expand this a little to explain that the two refused to fire him and resigned and that Bork himself did so.
- Will consider.
Push for investigation
edit- Importantly, Rodino told the committee that the Ford nomination would not be held "hostage" until the impeachment inquiry was completed. perhaps remove Importantly
- The sentence needs something, as the paragraph shifts from Albert to Rodino. Perhaps something like: Likewise, Rodino refused to be pressured, telling the committee....
- Likewise would work very well
- changed. Drdpw (talk) 01:48, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
- Likewise would work very well
- The sentence needs something, as the paragraph shifts from Albert to Rodino. Perhaps something like: Likewise, Rodino refused to be pressured, telling the committee....
Assembling of investigation staff
edit- plus scores of researchers, clerks, typists, and other support personnel, who all worked long, sometimes tedious hours. I feel like this should probably be removed, and the above paragraph merged with the one below.
- Removed (though a part of me desires to keep the detail as an efn- note) and merged. Drdpw (talk) 21:59, 25 August 2022 (UTC)
- I wouldn't object to an EFN note, it just doesn't warrant prose inclusion IMO; detracts from the focus on the key lawyers
- Removed (though a part of me desires to keep the detail as an efn- note) and merged. Drdpw (talk) 21:59, 25 August 2022 (UTC)
Inquiry staff investigation
edit- will say: This was the right course. There was no other way." it seems there should be double quotes here, perhaps: will say: "This was the right course. There was no other way.""
- done. Drdpw (talk) 01:48, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
- put off completing the request. suggest changing put off to delayed
- changed. Drdpw (talk) 01:48, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
Obstruction of justice
edit- and had some proponents of the article worried for a while. ... But in response, the proponents rallied seems a tad informal, perhaps which initially led some proponents of the article to worry, but ultimately caused them to rally. (bringing up the first sentence of the next paragraph to end the sentence)
- done.
Cambodia bombing / war powers
edit- intentionally concealed from Congress "the facts" suggest reordering to intentionally concealed "the facts" from Congress
- done.
Political fallout
edit- "Devastating—impeachable," Sandman told reporters (now having the "specificity" he had demanded during the hearings) suggest removing the parenthesis and inserting a comma, to "Devastating—impeachable," Sandman told reporters, now having the "specificity" he had demanded during the hearings
- done.
Epilogue
edit- Suggest renaming this section to "Aftermath"
- renamed.
- @Drdpw: That is all of my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 05:43, 26 August 2022 (UTC)