Talk:Impeachment process against Richard Nixon/GA1

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 22:58, 23 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Will take this on. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 22:58, 23 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Criteria

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GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

  • 1
    1.a  Y
    1.b  Y
  • 2
    2.a  Y
    2.b  Y
    2.c  Y
    2.d  Y (Some very high false positives on account of the abundance of quotes)
  • 3
    3.a  Y
    3.b  Y
  • 4
    4.a  Y
  • 5
    5.a  Y
  • 6
    6.a  Y
    6.b  Y
  • No DAB links  Y
  • No dead links  Y
  • No missing citations  N: At the close of the first phase of the hearings, the committee, on June 24, issued four more subpoenas for additional White House tapes and materials related to a variety of issues of concern.
  • Nixon resigned from office on August 9, 1974, before the House received the committee's recommendation for action.
    • I have removed this sentence. I cannot verify whether the final report was submitted before or after August 9, when Nixon resigned. Also, the sentence really is not needed as the article later shows that Nixon resigned before the articles were acted upon. Drdpw (talk) 13:19, 24 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Discussion

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Prose Suggestions

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Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

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  • Per MOS:LEDE, reduce the paragraphs to three or four paragraphs; this could fairly easily be done by merging the first and second, and third and fourth, IMO.

Background

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  • Nixon thereupon ordered that Cox be fired, precipitating the immediate departures of Attorney General Richardson and Deputy Attorney General William Ruckelshaus in what became known as the "Saturday Night Massacre. I would expand this a little to explain that the two refused to fire him and resigned and that Bork himself did so.
    • Will consider.

Push for investigation

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  • Importantly, Rodino told the committee that the Ford nomination would not be held "hostage" until the impeachment inquiry was completed. perhaps remove Importantly
    • The sentence needs something, as the paragraph shifts from Albert to Rodino. Perhaps something like: Likewise, Rodino refused to be pressured, telling the committee....
      Likewise would work very well
       Y changed. Drdpw (talk) 01:48, 26 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Assembling of investigation staff

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  • plus scores of researchers, clerks, typists, and other support personnel, who all worked long, sometimes tedious hours. I feel like this should probably be removed, and the above paragraph merged with the one below.
    •  Y Removed (though a part of me desires to keep the detail as an efn- note) and merged. Drdpw (talk) 21:59, 25 August 2022 (UTC)Reply
      I wouldn't object to an EFN note, it just doesn't warrant prose inclusion IMO; detracts from the focus on the key lawyers

Inquiry staff investigation

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Obstruction of justice

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  • and had some proponents of the article worried for a while. ... But in response, the proponents rallied seems a tad informal, perhaps which initially led some proponents of the article to worry, but ultimately caused them to rally. (bringing up the first sentence of the next paragraph to end the sentence)
    •  Y done.

Cambodia bombing / war powers

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  • intentionally concealed from Congress "the facts" suggest reordering to intentionally concealed "the facts" from Congress
    •  Y done.

Political fallout

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  • "Devastating—impeachable," Sandman told reporters (now having the "specificity" he had demanded during the hearings) suggest removing the parenthesis and inserting a comma, to "Devastating—impeachable," Sandman told reporters, now having the "specificity" he had demanded during the hearings
    •  Y done.

Epilogue

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