Talk:In My Place/GA1
Latest comment: 16 years ago by ThinkBlue in topic GA Review
GA Review
edit- Lead
- Every sentence of the first paragraph except the first starts "The song ..." I would suggest trying to come up with some alternatives.
- How does it look? -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:33, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Much better. Just one or two subtle changes can have a huge impact on the flow. Peanut4 (talk) 21:43, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Awesome. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:47, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Much better. Just one or two subtle changes can have a huge impact on the flow. Peanut4 (talk) 21:43, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- How does it look? -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:33, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- "It song was also nominated for two MuchMusic Video Awards in 2003 in the categories of Best international video–group and People's Choice: Favorite international group." "It song was ..." I presume should either by "It was" or "The song was"
- Fixed. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:33, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Background
- "But when band member, Jonny Buckland played the song on his guitar," Shouldn't really start sentences with but. I suggest that "However, ..." does the same job here.
- Fixed. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:33, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Music and lyrics
- "The three lines of the third verse allude to a man who loves a woman who does not reciprocate." who ... who ... makes this sentence difficult to understand.
- How 'bout now? -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:33, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Release
- When was it released in the UK?
- Same as the US date. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:33, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- "In 2005, "Speed of Sound", the lead single of the band's third album, X&Y, ranked number two.[20] "Speed of Sound" was marked as Coldplay's most successful single until "Viva la Vida", in which the song reached number one in 2008." I don't understand what relevance these two sentences have to "In My Place"?
- It means that both "In My Place" and "Speed of Sound" came close to becoming number one, but never did. The only number one song was "Viva la Vida". -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:33, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- I see. I've made one slight change to try and highlight that. Had any previous Coldplay song reached number one? If not it might be worth re-writing the final sentence to something like "No other Coldplay songs had reached as high as number two until Viva ..." At the moment it doesn't quite explain the relevance. Peanut4 (talk) 21:50, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- You'd think that maybe "Yellow" or "Clocks" be number one, but never made it to number one. Yeah, I know what you mean and "Viva la Vida" is the only Coldplay song to reach number. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:53, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- It makes full sense now. I would add one thing to explain that it was the first Coldplay song to reach number two - I would add a new sentence between "The song reached number eighteen on Billboard's Hot Modern Rock Tracks in 2002." and "In 2005, "Speed of Sound"," Peanut4 (talk) 22:08, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- I added a bit, don't know if that makes sense or not. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 22:18, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- I've given it a slight tweak. You might want to add a reference. Peanut4 (talk) 22:24, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Check. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 22:29, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- I've given it a slight tweak. You might want to add a reference. Peanut4 (talk) 22:24, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- I added a bit, don't know if that makes sense or not. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 22:18, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- It makes full sense now. I would add one thing to explain that it was the first Coldplay song to reach number two - I would add a new sentence between "The song reached number eighteen on Billboard's Hot Modern Rock Tracks in 2002." and "In 2005, "Speed of Sound"," Peanut4 (talk) 22:08, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- You'd think that maybe "Yellow" or "Clocks" be number one, but never made it to number one. Yeah, I know what you mean and "Viva la Vida" is the only Coldplay song to reach number. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:53, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- I see. I've made one slight change to try and highlight that. Had any previous Coldplay song reached number one? If not it might be worth re-writing the final sentence to something like "No other Coldplay songs had reached as high as number two until Viva ..." At the moment it doesn't quite explain the relevance. Peanut4 (talk) 21:50, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- It means that both "In My Place" and "Speed of Sound" came close to becoming number one, but never did. The only number one song was "Viva la Vida". -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:33, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Music video
- This might just be me. But what does "by-the-numbers" mean?
- Minute-for-minute of the song performance. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:33, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
I'll put it on hold while the above matters are dealt with. Peanut4 (talk) 21:16, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Just one minor point above. Peanut4 (talk) 21:50, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS):
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Again meets all the GA criteria and good to see a different kind of image. I might possibly suggest explaining the "by-the-numbers" above, and also add a reference to my slight tweak. Other than that, good luck with any future improvements. Peanut4 (talk) 22:24, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- I added a ref. to the statement you wrote and will explain the number-by-number info. Thanks for the review, it is most appreciated. ;) -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 22:29, 18 September 2008 (UTC)