Talk:India at the 2022 Winter Olympics/GA1
Latest comment: 1 month ago by TheNuggeteer in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Nominator: Magentic Manifestations (talk · contribs) 11:29, 9 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: TheNuggeteer (talk · contribs) 04:23, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
Going to review this later. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
04:23, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- @TheNuggeteer Please share the comments when you do take it up. I might be unavailable for the next few days, so might take sometime for me to revert. Thanks! Magentic Manifestations (talk) 07:25, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- Note: All source-based comments are based on the current revision.
🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
07:38, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
Lead
edit- Note b:
An Indian athlete entered the 2014 Winter Olympics as Independent Olympic Participants
add 'an' after 'as', remove the last 's'. - Note b: Source 8 does not mention the independent athlete, and source 9 either.
🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
07:38, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
Background
editThe nation made its first Winter Olympics appearance until the
, replace 'until' with 'on'.- You can add the name of the soldier mentioned in Source 14.
- Mention that sources 15, 16, and 18 need a subscription.
A volunteer served as the flag-bearer
Add 'While' before 'A', uncapitalize 'A'.🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
07:38, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
Competitors
edit- Just a table here, you could expand the section, but most of the competitor-worthy information is in Background anyway.
🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
07:38, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
Alpine skiing
edit- Source 26 says
Us ski and snowboard
, can you make the name proper? Or at least capitalize like US, Ski, Snowboard. - Mention that source 29 needs subscription.
Khan's effort was the best ever in the event for India beating the previous best set by Jeremy Bujakowski in the 1968 Winter Olympics.
Sentence needs copyediting and does not meet NPOV.🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
07:38, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
My review, you can fix the comments, and I'll check back when you're finished. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
07:38, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- @Magentic Manifestations: Ping.
🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
08:29, 5 September 2024 (UTC)- @TheNuggeteer:, Comments have been addressed. Thanks! Magentic Manifestations (talk) 08:27, 12 September 2024 (UTC)
- Everything looks good.
🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
08:31, 12 September 2024 (UTC)
- Everything looks good.
- @TheNuggeteer:, Comments have been addressed. Thanks! Magentic Manifestations (talk) 08:27, 12 September 2024 (UTC)
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